Many people want to be successful. but it is not easy. However, a few people get to the top.Most of them succeed because of their hard work,but in my view, they also need to be talented and have natural ability to do something well.
If you want to be good at something you must practice hard and regularly.For example , international footballers have to train for many hours every day.If a professional footballer dose not train,his manager will drop him from the team.
However, talent is essential,too. Although some people try hard.They do not achieve much because they are not naturally talented .I like singing.but I will not make money unless I have good singing voice.Similarity if someone wants to work in finance. they need to have relevant natural skills.
Talent and hard work are not the only significant things.As we can often improve our skills by taking courses.Money is useful
,too.Luck can also help you achieve success.For example, you can be more successful in business if you meet the right people.SO there can be many factors that contribute to success.
In conclusion,I do not think you can do something consistently well if you do not practice and you are not talented. However, some people become famous for other reasons.Everyone is different,so you can not say why one person suceeds and another person does not
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1128.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 224.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03571428571 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9903548656 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598214285714 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 96.038325683 49.4020404114 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.8 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.01903807615 518% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191157846378 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718400566934 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665472393379 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105044313085 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547552095397 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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