Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?
In recent days, development era has been changed people’s life, technologies afford great influence in which it has affected people in Some-land. However, technology makes different perspective for certain society. There are two following reasons to support the topic.
First of all, some people feels that technology occur negative impact to their children: computer, play station, tablet, and so on. Real sample is young person getting indolent to finish their homework because they only wants to play games instead do their homework. Other believes that technology creates juvenile become antisocial in their vicinity. However, on the other side, by way of technology assist human being in many fields of work and it produces efficiency and effective to perform occupations, such as manufacture, factory, and any other areas.
Second of all, other people have their own faith concerning sophisticated technology; they assume that technology has been auxiliary people in many way. Technology brings new atmosphere in their life. This thing provides knowledge and insight about something that people never know before. For instance, Facebook and Skype as the product of development technology takes people to the new world. Those products are social media as well as social network which confer society to meet other people from around the world, in fact leads people obtain lots benefits. Several folk could meet partner in life, make new friends, meet siblings, peculiarly parents who have children study in abroad or far from home. By technology, parents could know how the condition of their children via Facebook or Skype. In contrary, it seems Facebook and Skype also transfer bad effect to myriad people: fraud, kidnap, robbery, and terrorist recruitment.
To sum up, in this modern period of time, for some humankind technology transport new energy. Even though, a few people ignore existence of technology yet they should be accepting this development equipment inevitably and with wortheartedly. In addition, this previous plan seems rather dubious.
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Sentence: In recent days, development era has been changed people life, technology afford great influence in which affected people in Some-land.
Suggestion: In recent days, development era has changed people's life, technologies afford great influence in which it has affected people in Some-land.
Sentence: Second of all, other people have their own faith concerning sophisticated technology; they assume that technology has been helps people in many way.
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Sentence: In contrary, it seems Facebook and Skype also transfer bad effect to myriad people: fraud, kidnap, robbery, and terrorist recruitment through this commodities.
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Sentence: To sum up, in this modern period of time, technology transport new energy for some humankind.
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Suggestion: Refer to transport and new
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