Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?
In the 21st century, the inventions of science and technology like television, social media and video games have a great impact on the intellectual and society development. Some people contend that the electronic media and the violence in game have no negative on the individual behavior, while I disagree with this contention, because these things have influenced the society’s behavior.
To begin with, the television shows which people are watching in these days like Reality games and wrestling, and children are more fond of these shows can easily be influenced, try to imitate them which could result in severe injury. Also the computer games which involve fighting and killing opponents, this could also lead to influence in their later life, they can commit crimes which can increase the problem for government to tackle with these situation.
The solution to this problem is to divert the attention of the children from these shows and video games to healthy activities. Parents should encourage them to play sports like cricket and football with their friends. Parents should prohibits them to watch such programs and video games which could have negative impact on their personality. Moreover, government should provide adequate sports facilities like building more sports ground, so in this way the society will be free from negative trends like prostitution and drug abuse.
In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that it’s a parents as well as government responsibility to development of a child behavior and by providing facilities related to sports. Government should make laws for the shows which are no appropriate for the society and children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...em which could result in severe injury. Also the computer games which involve fighti...
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Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'these situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; these situations
...e problem for government to tackle with these situation. The solution to this problem is to ...
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'prohibit'
Suggestion: prohibit
...ball with their friends. Parents should prohibits them to watch such programs and video g...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a parent' or simply 'parents'?
Suggestion: a parent; parents
... would like to reiterate that it's a parents as well as government responsibility to...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...propriate for the society and children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36981132075 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75723844282 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539622641509 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.0407680193 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.3 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171289037791 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704291909845 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838422546649 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110706400285 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083189126674 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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