The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
In world, any human seeking for how he/she can ease their life. Therefore, technology advancement increased and people got their life easy. People want all luxuries things as rich people using it. However, all coins have second side, technology uses in this era drastically increased day by day. But, this conveniences of life make human weak. Hence, I entirely agree with this statement that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life harmful for human.
In ancient times, there were no use of machinery and technology, even today some country are not fully advance. This countries rural area people not much use technolgy. If we directly compared to their rural areas people and those who living in urban areas with full advantages, People of rural area are more strong than those who start day with technology and end day with technology, because people of rural area body are daily used for their hard work, they do not have any technology to sit on chair or seat and their work are done by their hands.
Furthermore, today social media craze tremendously increased. If any human got their small leisure time than he/she direcly see him/her social media updates. For instance, college students are totally attached with social media. This directly affects their study and therefore, students become weak in study got disturbed.
In conclusion, real use of technology is for saving time and giving convenience to human. But, this prevents people from becoming independant and strong.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... drastically increased day by day. But, this conveniences of life make human weak. H...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...day some country are not fully advance. This countries rural area people not much us...
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Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ial media craze tremendously increased. If any human got their small leisure time ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 58.6224719101 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1261.0 2235.4752809 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 243.0 442.535393258 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18930041152 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52908700023 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 215.323595506 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59670781893 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 78.5096172453 60.3974514979 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0666666667 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172074863788 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724265009279 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903348248618 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124698003459 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991183143544 0.0667264976115 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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