TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

One of the most important requirements for a civilized society is a supreme education system. Governments have concern about how they can optimize training methods in order to flourish their country. Many claim that new modern technologies have destructive effect on their attempts to improve school children status while some posit they could help to have well-educated people. I disagree that it is difficult today to educate young persons because of cell phones or internet.

First, smart phones and social networking and the other devices are just a tool which human being has invented to use for some purposes. So whether these apparatus are used for wasting time or in order to a specific good goal is up to parents and teachers. For example learning machine systems as online platforms need web environment and mobile to increase quality of teaching and they are not means of spending time. So we can use many online inventions serving to our nurturing systems instead of letting our boys and girls be servant to these.

In other point, researches have proved that playing games has a positive consequent on creativity of a person because these games force people to think more, try to get out of a challenge, design a strategy or many other subjects which could be used in real life. So this theory says that a person who plays game or get into internet does not waste time merely and there many benefits gained in this process vice versa.

Third, nobody can not imagine our world without internet in these days while in many countries computer knowledge is a main factor for being well lettered person. Hence our generation should learn how to use these contemporary devices and educating children is not in contradiction with new trend of developing.

In conclusion, every creation in this universe has paradox effects and it belongs to human how to exploit beneficial aspects or get adverse result from a facilitator.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many claims'.
Suggestion: Many claims
...ods in order to flourish their country. Many claim that new modern technologies have destr...
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Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to machine'
Suggestion: to machine
...ents and teachers. For example learning machine systems as online platforms need web en...
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Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...ut internet in these days while in many countries computer knowledge is a main factor for...
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Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... factor for being well lettered person. Hence our generation should learn how to use ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, so, third, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99691358025 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62107190074 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62037037037 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6171896313 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.538461538 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139385531343 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557980889787 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597690342728 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653059248765 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498612523994 0.0645574589148 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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