Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Dr. Field and Dr. Karp carried out two independent studies of education process of children in Tertia. While the first researcher applied an observation-centered method, the latest used an interview-centered. Having received diverse information on the research topic, some anthropologists rely more on the interview-centered method for studying child-rearing process in Tertia. Although, to come to this conclusion anthropologists have to provide strong arguments to support it, while the passage does not provide any of them.
First of all, we cannot conclude that Dr. Field's approach was incorrect and Dr. Karp's is reliable, because it has been the span of twenty years between their researches. This period of time is sufficient for changes to be happened in the culture of Tertia. Twenty years ago Dr. Field could in fact observed trends and fads in the education of children that were actual for that moment, but then cultural changes had happened under some circumstances which lead to a new raising practice in Tertia.
Moreover, the reason why two researches obtained two different pictures of child-educating practices is in the scale of two studies. While Dr. Field was concentrated on the Tertia Island in particular, Dr. Karp interviewed several islands including Tertia. Thus, the latest researched gained more average data on the process of educating. He did not specify the Tertia’s children, thus, there is a possibility that the children brought up by adults in the village.
Also, it is unclear why Dr. Karp concluded that Dr. Field’s study is not accurate and whether his opinion laid in the basis of other anthropologists’ recommendation. There are not supportive arguments claiming that that or this study is unreliable. Perhaps, more information, statistics need to be presented to prove as Dr. Karp’s point of view as other anthropologists’. Until that moment their recommendation bears a subjective shade.
To sum up, based on the arguments presented in the essay, we cannot rely on the conclusion that Dr. Field approach and results were wrong, and that to study child-education process in Tertia it is better apply Dr. Karp’s method.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1779 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.187 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.19 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.874 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ty years between their researches. This period of time is sufficient for changes to be happene...
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Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...e are not supportive arguments claiming that that or this study is unreliable. Perhaps, m...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Until” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of view as other anthropologists'. Until that moment their recommendation bears ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, thus, while, in fact, in particular, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42565597668 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4658825422 2.78398813304 124% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556851311953 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9873421478 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.3125 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323542029075 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100524265936 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07537693838 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174494210273 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525351219874 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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