tpo-46
The passage claims that storing medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. However, the professor finds all the ideas provided by the passage dubious and presents some evidence to refute them all.
First, the author argues that using electronic records may help to reduce the costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records while paper records need a great storage space mentioning that electronic files take up virtually no space. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that reducing the costs does not seem to be as significant as mentioned by the passage. He mentions that when doctors visit their patients, they usually do not throw out the papers because they need them for the back up with their signature on them. Using electronic format may still need paper-based record keeping for future use.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that using electronic medical records may reduce the chance of medical errors caused by the eligible handwritings of doctors and this may have significant bad consequences. Conversely, the professor brings up the idea that doctors still use pen and paper while visiting their patients and the records will be converted to electronic formats by their staff after that. So when staff enters this information in the systems, there is still a high probability of errors happening by the staff while entering the information into the computers and reading the handwriting of the doctors.
Third, the passage asserts that electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather great amount of information using computers. In contrast, the lecturer dismisses the issue due to the fact that this method does not necessarily benefit the researchers because they may still find it difficult to access the information available on the databases because there are certain strict privacy laws that do not allow access to these files without certain permissions such as the permission of the patients and the researchers should follow these strict rules. The patients may also lock the access and permission to their medical records so that the permissions are not often allowed unless for their own future medical needs.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, third, while, in contrast, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 364.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32142857143 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65130671622 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502747252747 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 419.366225166 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.5744428638 49.2860985944 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.416666667 110.228320801 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 21.698381199 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06452816374 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524853356 0.272083759551 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216472243882 0.0996497079465 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166477936115 0.0662205650399 251% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328743589448 0.162205337803 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450969161067 0.0443174109184 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.3589403974 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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