The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. This shows that eating a substantial amount of fish can clearly prevent colds. Furthermore, since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, attendance levels will improve. Therefore, we recommend the daily use of a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author argues that eating a substantial amount of fish will help West Merians in reducing absenteeism and preventing cold. However, he is unable to justify his assumptions logically.
Initially, the argument claims, based on a study report, that since the fish consumption is high in East Meria, it is the only reason that their people visit the doctor once or twice a year for the treatment of colds. However, the claim is unable to present any justification that just because of eating fish the people of East Meria don’t catch colds and are healthier. It could be because they incorporate other wholesome foods in their diet and maintain strong health regimes and workouts.
In addition, it surmises that since eating fish has worked for East Merians, it will also work for the people of West Meria. Here the author fails to take into account that there could be various possibilities that consumption of fish works for the former and might not work for the latter considering the difference in weather, kind of fish, and environment. The health conditions and age of people between the two towns have been neglected which play a crucial role.
More so, the memo recommends the daily use nutritional supplements derived from fish oil. Is eating fish similar to using fish supplements? Will consuming supplements derive from fish oil yield the same health benefits as eating food that has fish in it? Had the author mentioned the facts of similar health benefits or provided data to prove that, the claim would have been sound.
Thus, on the basis of above mentioned fallacies, the argument that consuming fish on a frequent basis will help prevent cold and eradicate absenteeism in West Meria, does not possess information to validate its claims and renders itself spurious.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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also need to argue:
Furthermore, since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, attendance levels will improve.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 299 350
No. of Characters: 1451 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.853 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.522 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.266 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 298.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03691275168 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59640698262 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563758389262 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.646195512 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.461538462 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103177924834 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390948954367 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327158429836 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615180244836 0.128457276422 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028736670861 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.