Law can change human behavior. Do you agree or not?
Nowadays, law enforcement has become a long-running dispute among the public all over that world, which leads to moot question “whether regulations can change human behavior or not?”. It is a widely held view that obtaining proper legislation is highly beneficial, whereas I tend to believe that one must weigh up carefully the pros and cons of this issue.
To begin with, it is a common belief that adjusting accurate laws plays a vital role in the behavior of each society. To put into consideration, I express several reasons why I support this idea. First and foremost is that the crime rate will be diminished and the motivation of committing the offense decreases. Secondly, it can be argued that the prevalence of some perilous crimes, such as embezzlement, theft, corruption that cause damaging consequences decrease in the communities. In addition to this information, it should be mentioned that the majority of laws are efficient, including the traffic light and fastening seatbelt that guarantee the people’s lives. A very tangible example to illustrate would be Thailand that smuggling the drugs is excessively prevail, while the government could control it by tougher law.
However, there is no doubt that law enforcement provides people with various negative points. It should be taken into account that the fear will be developed in the society due to the death penalty or prolonged captivations. Moreover, it is quite clear that the criminals will be encouraged to revenge after prison and the violence and aggressive behavior might be raised. For instance, South Korea's nation has been deprived of their civil rights because of unreasonable laws.
To recapitulate, I entirely agree that obtaining laws in order to change people’s manner must be taken into consideration. However, as every garden may have some weeds, the local authorities are recommended to enforce stricter legislation, and individuals are hoped to heighten their intellect.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: prevailed
...that smuggling the drugs is excessively prevail, while the government could control it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.5418719212 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 6.10837438424 213% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 5.94088669951 252% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 20.9802955665 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 31.9359605911 103% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 5.75862068966 278% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1207.87684729 139% => OK
No of words: 312.0 242.827586207 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38461538462 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.049793593 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 139.433497537 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641025641026 0.580463131201 110% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 379.143842365 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2388352561 50.4703680194 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 104.977214359 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.9669160288 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 7.25397266985 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 2.75862068966 290% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17761740777 0.242375264174 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521613962679 0.0925447433944 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658814217525 0.071462118173 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103574692044 0.151781067708 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413744799572 0.0609392437508 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 12.6369458128 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.1260098522 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.9458128079 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 11.5310837438 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.32886699507 119% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 55.0591133005 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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