TPO 49- Integrated essay
Author and lecture talks about unique characteristics of hump back whale that is migrating to far distance in order to search for food and mate. Reading implies that whale uses star to reach destination. While lecture states that there are no enough proofs to convince that.
Firstly, reading points out that whales have high intellectual capability and well developed sensory system to locate stars at night. Lecture refutes this, according to him; whales lack that ability to navigate through stars. In addition, he provide example of ducks that follow this method of predicting direction from stars. As a consequence, he disagrees by explaining whale do not possess high cognitive function.
Secondly, author compares humpback whales with birds and animals; they both travel in straight lines they use specific landmark to judge the distance in straight lines, while humpback take help of stars to orient themselves to appropriate. On the other hand, lecture denies that by saying whales can maintain these straight lines due to strong external magnetic force. Furthermore, they contain bio-magnetite in their body, which attracts with the magnetic field of earth and they re-orient them to straight line.
Third, author emphasize on spy-hopping personality trait; that is swimming with head above the ocean to keep track of stars. However, professor cast doubt on this, whale do show this is less feature of spy hopping. But this doesn’t prove the point in reading, because they often do that during daytime. In addition, this behavior is also seen in sharks on contrary they are not long distance swimmers. So, it is worth saying that hump back whale do not rely on stars for migration.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t whale uses star to reach destination. While lecture states that there are no enough...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...navigate through stars. In addition, he provide example of ducks that follow this metho...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, well, while, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1434.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23357664234 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59060339645 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631386861314 0.540411800872 117% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4114240375 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449735954983 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1276654344 0.0996497079465 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615105001548 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235869489186 0.162205337803 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442006035249 0.0443174109184 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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