There is increasing concern over children obesity in communities, which affect negatively in the development of society due to the fact that they are the future generations of a nation. Therefore, I partly agree with the idea that the government should be responsible to solve this problem.
One of the main drawbacks of being overweight is that it causes numerous serious diseases like diabetes and hypertension, which may shorten an individual’s lives and diminish the future nation human resources. Therefore, the government play a crucial role in mitigating this problem. In my opinion, the authority should adjust the nation budget to promote a healthy diet. In addition, a more stringent policy over the number of fat ingredients in food and drink products should be conducted.
On the other hand, parents and schools are also liable for their children’s good health. Firstly, with the advancement of technology, most children hobbies are playing video games and watching television which lead to a sedentary lifestyle. In addition, to satisfy the high expectation from their parents, a child is required to allocate more time with private tutors. As a result, they become lazy or have less time to participate in outdoor activities such as playing sports and doing exercise. Therefore, to solve this, besides some imperative subjects such as math and science, schools should engage children in physical exercises. Meanwhile, parents should spend more time to supervise their children’s diet carefully and adjust their children’s schedule to balance between physical and mental education.
In conclusion, parents, schools and government all play a crucial role in a healthy lifestyle of children. The healthier the young generation being the wealthier the country is.
- Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 56
- Some people say that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries shops and public transport Do you agree or disagree 80
- Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development; however, others think the social value is lost as a result of economic development. To what extent do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh its disadva 78
- Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons? Solutions to change negative attitudes? 73
- Subjects at schools are selected by authorities such as the central government not by the teachers Some say that these subjects should be chosen by teachers Do you agree or disagree with this statement 62
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...ocate more time with private tutors. As a results, they become lazy or have less time to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47637795276 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06743448476 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606299212598 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2283558835 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222230417277 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780835253913 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809808541184 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127629423356 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492164428987 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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