Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for
any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement.
Learning to play a musical instrument often requires a specific skill and knowledge. Thus, it could be a great achievement when children are able playing the instrument. I personally do entirely agree with this view, which I will explain below
On the one hand, it seems that playing a musical instrument has more significant benefits. The first one, Individuals would naturally improve their patience and perseverance. Learning the instrument, for example, teach children how to struggle through hours, months, and sometimes years of practice. Secondly, It appears that children's academic skills might improve as well. This is because learning musical instrument introduce young children to basic physics subject. For instance, playing non-string instruments, such as drums and the vibraphone, provide opportunities for children to explore what are the scientific principles on the instrument. Furthermore, I believe that another benefit of playing instruments could foster open-mindedness about culture. Where children are given opportunities learning and playing a variety of music from all over the place, they also learn of music background, such music as Jazz is original music from South America countries.
Looking for another perspective, it might be said that playing a musical instrument gives fewer benefits, this is due to children, in the future, have often a career that would be far different from music. However, having a talent to play musical instrument could help children determine their future occupation.
To conclude, I believe that playing musical instrument is beneficial, not only for children development but also for future career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62948207171 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98465677435 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597609561753 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5032348158 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.692307692 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265570375202 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105429460838 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064787358093 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17945139897 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613278874656 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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