Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for
any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement.
Learning a musical instrument is tough activities that require a long time duration process to master - the instrument - this could be a great achievement due to the tremendous impact on childhood development. I personally do entirely agree with this view, which I will explain below.
On the one hand, I do appreciate that some people think differently saying that playing a musical instrument has more significant benefits. As improving their patience and perseverance. While in the learning process, children would learn a struggle through hours, months, and sometimes years of practice. For example, children learn playing a piano instrument, generally, they spend at least two years of practice. Secondly, It seems to me that learning musical instrument might improve children's academic skills as well. In music class, although children are learning a music subject, they are also taught a basic maths and physics - for example, learning to play non-string instruments - they are taught the scientific principles of the instrument. Furthermore, I believe that another benefit of playing instruments could foster open-mindedness about culture. This is because of plenty variety of music from all over the places from traditional to modern instrument, where children might probably learn to music background.
Looking for another perspective, it might be said that playing a musical instrument has no a considerable benefits, this is due to children, in the future, have often a career that could be far different from music. However, having a musical talent would help children determine their future occupation.
To conclude, I believe that playing musical instrument offer more benefits, not only for children development but also for their future career.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 333, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to play'.
Suggestion: to play
...f practice. For example, children learn playing a piano instrument, generally, they spe...
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Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...d that playing a musical instrument has no a considerable benefits, this is due to...
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Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'benefit'?
Suggestion: benefit
...usical instrument has no a considerable benefits, this is due to children, in the future...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, at least, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52222222222 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99435818443 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0219109613 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.692307692 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237189881488 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931725586561 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056583653424 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15313819651 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510990353575 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.