TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

Both reading and listening states the vessel of copper of which is of ancient time. But the argument point is whether the copper vessel surrounded by the iron is used as source of electricity in ancient time or not. The author of the reading believes that it is not possible to be used as a source of electricity. The lecture casts doubt about this matter and he says that it can possible to be used as a source of electricity.

Firstly, the reading says that if it is used as a source of electricity there should be presence of conductor or wires. But author says that there is no conductor. The lecture challenged this statement. He says that the device is found not by archaeologist but by people. Furthermore he adds that those people does not have any knowledge that which thing should be preserve and
which things should not be.

Secondly the author of the reading says that copper is found in the Selucia which is sacred scrolls and of same shape. So it is not used as power source of electricity. Lecture rebut this argument. He says that if there is presence of scrolls there may be chance of making this copper and iron together and fill up this liquid. This is in further can be used as source of electricity.

Thirdly the author says that which purpose does this electricity is used. If there is any purpose found for this electricity it would be appear. Clearly there is no purpose means that there is no use of this copper as electricity source. Lecture on the other hand go against the statement.He says that surely there is purpose in which it is used. The purpose is medical and ancient people uses the electricity for shock and it is called as invisible power. In addition people some time believes that there is magical power and that magical power is the source of electricity which is used by ancient doctor. so it is possible that those source of electricity can be used of power source by ancient people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...und not by archaeologist but by people. Furthermore he adds that those people does not have...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'preserved'?
Suggestion: preserved
...ny knowledge that which thing should be preserve and which things should not be. Sec...
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Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...hat which purpose does this electricity is used. If there is any purpose found for...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...the other hand go against the statement.He says that surely there is purpose in wh...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...and it is called as invisible power. In addition people some time believes that there is...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ricity which is used by ancient doctor. so it is possible that those source of ele...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 10.4613686534 315% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 348.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57183908046 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50439401144 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 145.348785872 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.341954022989 0.540411800872 63% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1455468158 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7619047619 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 7.06452816374 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206598952178 0.272083759551 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804922732205 0.0996497079465 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502149759161 0.0662205650399 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119471088085 0.162205337803 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606930541004 0.0443174109184 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.3589403974 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 12.2367328918 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.34 8.42419426049 75% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 63.6247240618 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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