The author here claims that the decline is population of arctic deer is probably because of the effects of global warming. the author here failed to provide us with many specific evidence to counter his argument. Thereby his argument is weak and if he would have provided us with the specific evidence to corroborate his argument his argument would indeed be the strong argument.
The author here claims that the arctic deer search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. He failed to provide us with evidence that while they were travelling on ice, how they quench their hunger during the course of year? It is practically impossible for a plant to grow on ice. From where they get food during that course. If he would have given us the specific details on the what part of year and how much they have to travel, how long they can survive. This would have bolster his argument and but he failed to mention, thus it is doubtful to agree on this claim.
Also according to the reports from local hunters, the deer's population is declining it is possible that they are trying to befool the authority to be on the safer side. They must have hunted the deer's and just to be on the safe side lying over the issue. If the author would have provided us with the specific evidence of what are the particular reasons for the extenuating deer's population. It have given us a strong point to believe his argument.
Thirdly, if their habitat is limited because of plant favorable condition to grow. on what part of the arctic region particularly they reside and for what period of time. And he hasn't mentioned whether the region they migrate have what temperature during their migration. How can one be ascertain on this without any specific evidence. Thus weakening the argument.
The effects of global warming are adverse for all the species on planet earth. But is there the effects of global warming more than other areas. And it is a fact that when ice melts the temperature of air decrease and wind speed is usually greater than the actual. Their body may not have certain immunity against cold wind and must have died from cold. If the Author would have provided us with this specific evidence on how deer respond to certain temperature, his argument would be on a strong ground, but we don't have any of such information present in the argument.
In conclusion, there are many parameters which must be responsible for the decline in the population of arctic deer unfortunately author failed to provide us the specific evidences to believe is argument. If he would have provided us above mentioned evidence his argument would be a strong one.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 473 350
No. of Characters: 2171 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.664 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.59 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.366 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.083 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.375 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...cause of the effects of global warming. the author here failed to provide us with m...
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Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much specific evidence', 'a good deal of specific evidence'.
Suggestion: much specific evidence; a good deal of specific evidence
...e author here failed to provide us with many specific evidence to counter his argument. Thereby his ar...
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Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
... Thereby his argument is weak and if he would have provided us with the specific evidence to corrob...
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Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'his argument'.
Suggestion: his argument
...th the specific evidence to corroborate his argument his argument would indeed be the strong argument. T...
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Line 2, column 102, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...y moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. He failed to provide us with ...
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Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...ng on ice, how they quench their hunger during the course of year? It is practically impossible for ...
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Line 2, column 374, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had given'?
Suggestion: had given
...they get food during that course. If he would have given us the specific details on the what par...
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Line 2, column 517, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'bolstered'.
Suggestion: bolstered
... long they can survive. This would have bolster his argument and but he failed to menti...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...it is doubtful to agree on this claim. Also according to the reports from local hun...
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Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
... to the reports from local hunters, the deers population is declining it is possible ...
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Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...ide lying over the issue. If the author would have provided us with the specific evidence of what a...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
... particular reasons for the extenuating deers population. It have given us a strong p...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...or the extenuating deers population. It have given us a strong point to believe his ...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...e of plant favorable condition to grow. on what part of the arctic region particul...
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Line 4, column 155, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...n particularly they reside and for what period of time. And he hasnt mentioned whether the reg...
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Line 4, column 178, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...ide and for what period of time. And he hasnt mentioned whether the region they migra...
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Line 6, column 369, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...must have died from cold. If the Author would have provided us with this specific evidence on how d...
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Line 6, column 513, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ent would be on a strong ground, but we dont have any of such information present in...
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Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cific evidences to believe is argument. If he would have provided us above mention...
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Line 7, column 211, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...evidences to believe is argument. If he would have provided us above mentioned evidence his argumen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, third, thirdly, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 28.8173652695 180% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70700636943 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4196855257 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.3991507431 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.5087690656 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.68 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.84 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.64 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210386032359 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766469923058 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999966959699 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122221212714 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102947170491 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.32208582834 84% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.