Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Arctic deer can live in very versatile environments. They balance between warm areas that vegetation grow in and icy bodies of water that enable the deer to migrate from island to island. The author’s argument regarding a decline in the amount of Arctic deer due to global warming is inadequate due to the underlying assumptions and generalizations made. While the brief statement that lack of sighted deer is due to global warming trends appears to be a robust idea, the deficit between what is stated and what there is evidence for is too large to be overlooked. This ultimately causes a weak argument that will count against the author’s conclusion.
The author explains that the supposed decline in deer population is according to local hunters. The author doesn’t state whether the decline of the deer population is over the past season, the past decade, or the past century. This is very important if the decline in population is going to be related to a global phenomenon. If there is a huge difference in the amount of Arctic deer between spring and winter, it may be because more deer are born in the spring. If the difference in the amount of deer is over the course of a few years, it may be due to a new predator in their environment. It is very important for the author to explicitly state over what course of time did the local hunters start seeing a difference in Arctic deer populations. If the author were to state over the past century, the argument of a decline in deer population due to global warming would be strengthened.
Correlation does not prove causation. While the decline of deer may correlate with global warming, there needs to be more proof in order for global warming to deemed the cause of death of deer. The author needs to provide facts that proof that global warming causes the ice to not form over large bodies of seas. Perhaps global warming does not cause the ice to melt, and a different outside factor could cause portions of the water to stay in liquid form. The author needs to provide more proof and facts that global warming is the cause of the lack of ice in the sea in order for the argument to be strengthened. Furthermore, then the author would need to state that the lack of ice results in Arctic deer death.
Although the Arctic deer have a habit of traveling over ice platforms to get to different islands to search for food, it is assumed that it is vital for their survival. However, that may not be the case as deer can adapt and survive over time. The author never states whether migration is vital for the survival of Arctic deer. Due to adaptation, Arctic deer may no longer need to migrate over dangerous icy waters in order to travel for food. The author needs to indicate whether or not migration of Arctic deer is a necessity for their survival in order to strengthen the argument that their decline is due to their inability to travel now that bodies of water no longer turn icy.
Global warming can be the cause of the decline in Arctic deer over the past century due to fossil fuels warming the sea temperatures. It would result in causing ice to not form endangering the Arctic deer from their migration patterns. However, because of generalizations the author’s argument lacks compelling and affluent reasoning to convince other’s that global warming is the cause of the decline of the Arctic deer population.
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- Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enoug 75
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 598 350
No. of Characters: 2738 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.945 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.579 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.465 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.499 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.423 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... bodies of water that enable the deer to migrate from island to island. The autho...
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Line 7, column 474, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... for food. The author needs to indicate whether or not migration of Arctic deer is a necessity...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 104.0 55.5748502994 187% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2821.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 597.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72529313233 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63290475688 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.346733668342 0.468620217663 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 889.2 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0593423504 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9615384615 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.42307692308 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240629949425 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878723944158 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686850531482 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161166389885 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512476034201 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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