Decline Population
The arguer concludes that the city will have sufficient funds to sponsor city facilities and support adult programs. The claim is based on the decline in the birthrate. The argument does hold some valid assertions, however, it rests on three unjustified assumptions, which unless substantiated, make the claim unpersuasive.
Firstly, the argument is based on the assumption that the number of students is directly proportional to the birthrate. It is true that the population of a town influences the population of students in school. However, thats not the only determining factor. Students from other towns could also be enrolled at the school. It is possible that the schools have a large number of students from other cities, thereby increasing the population of students. Even if the number of people in the city is declining, the population in schools will remain high if the significant number of students are from other towns. This possibility strongly weakens the arguments assumption.
Secondly, the arguments unjustifiably assumes that the population is still on a decrease based on the previous year’s statistics. The data provided shows that the population decreased by half from five years ago, as of last year. yet, no information has been provided showing statistics of the current year. Changes in population are caused by many factors. For example disasters, wars. It is possible that the city experienced a calamity that caused the population to decrease in the previous years. It is also possible that those factors no longer affect the city. In this case, the downward trend in the number of people in the city is likely to be reversed.
Finally, the author, being of the view of reducing funding of athletic fields, is assuming that only young people use the fields. Athletic fields are constructed for recreational purposes. In most cities, all kinds of people access these fields to exercise. There is no evidence provided proving the assumption that only young people use these fields. Even if the population is truly declining, the older generation likely use the same recreational facilities.
In Conclusion, the argument rests on unproven assumptions that the number of students will reduce due to the decrease in populations, the recreational fields are only being used by younger generation, and that the population is decreasing at the same rate as of last year. In order to put the argument on a more sound footing, the author needs to provide evidence that the number of students in school is directly proportional to the towns population by showing that the majority of the students are from within the town. The arguer must also show that the recreational athletic fields are never used by the older people by showing statistics of the age groups of people who visit the athletic fields.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 461 350
No. of Characters: 2310 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.634 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.011 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.745 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.44 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.416 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.52 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... based on the decline in the birthrate. The argument does hold some valid assertion...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ulation of students in school. However, thats not the only determining factor. Studen...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...l. It is possible that the schools have a large number of students from other cities, thereby inc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 649, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
.... This possibility strongly weakens the arguments assumption. Secondly, the arguments ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yet
...f from five years ago, as of last year. yet, no information has been provided showi...
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Line 9, column 435, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
... school is directly proportional to the towns population by showing that the majority...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 643, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y the older people by showing statistics of the age groups of people who visit th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15401301518 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84617876715 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427331887202 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.8002067931 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3846153846 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7307692308 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26923076923 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206865043831 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618478197681 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084268620955 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100299706099 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446818430136 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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