The writer states that Crust Copper Company(CCC) has prurchased more that 10 thousands square miles of land in West Fredonia tropical nation and started mining brass in that land, which he claims that this minig will cause some negative effects on some endangered animal species, thus will make a catastrophic enviromental disaster. His suggestion to solve this problem is by convincing people not to buy the products by the (CCC) unless they stop their plans of mining. The argument in the letter has many flaws and it is not convincing at all.
First, there is no such evidence that those endangered animals are affected by the mining proccess of copper. There is so much mechanisims in animals to adopt such changes in the surrounding enviroment, so that some animals are less sensitive to pollution rather than others. For example, one of the animals that is very resistent to pollution is scorpion, it can defend itself againest the radioactive pollution, while spiders cannot adopt to just a minor changes in the air temprature. Thus, the argument regarding the relationship between pollution and the endagered species in not correct.
Second, the auther said that the company purchased more that 10000 square miles of land, which is a very small area compared to the whole area that the animals reside in, this argument's logical soundness is weak, because it is easy to the animals to transfer from one area to another if they faced any kind of bother from the mining operatoins. so the writer should give more specific reason to defend this point.
Last point to mention is the solution he suggested, by telling people to stop purchasing the products from (CCC) till they stop their future plans. This reason is very weak because what if the compane export it's products to outside countries? can we access those people outside and tell them about the problem that it makes in our country? of course no. Moreover, it is extremely impossible to make a general opinion againest a big, well reputed company like (CCC), there is no way to do such wide decision toward this company forgetting that there are so much fans of this company. As a result, the writer shold pay attention to the size of the effort he suggest to solve the problem.
In sum, the overall letter is full of falws, not only that the auther did not mention any evidance about how animals are affected by copper mining, but also he forget the ability of animals to change their hometwon easily, and he suggested a very difficult approch to prevent the company from doing it's plans. As the letter stands, it is full of weakness points and it isnot accepted at all.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The writer states that Crust Copper Comp...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aws and it is not convincing at all. First, there is no such evidence that th...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...oactive pollution, while spiders cannot adopt to just a minor changes in the air temprat...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he endagered species in not correct. Second, the auther said that the company...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... whole area that the animals reside in, this arguments logical soundness is weak, be...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...d of bother from the mining operatoins. so the writer should give more specific re...
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...pecific reason to defend this point. Last point to mention is the solution he...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Can
...port its products to outside countries? can we access those people outside and tell...
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Suggestion: Of
...e problem that it makes in our country? of course no. Moreover, it is extremely im...
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Line 7, column 558, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...is company forgetting that there are so much fans of this company. As a result, the...
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Line 7, column 587, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ere are so much fans of this company. As a result, the writer shold pay attention...
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Line 7, column 659, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest solving'.
Suggestion: suggest solving
... attention to the size of the effort he suggest to solve the problem. In sum, the overal...
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Line 7, column 659, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
... attention to the size of the effort he suggest to solve the problem. In sum, t...
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...ort he suggest to solve the problem. In sum, the overall letter is full of fa...
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Line 9, column 166, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'forgets'.
Suggestion: forgets
... affected by copper mining, but also he forget the ability of animals to change their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, kind of, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81497797357 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45396988818 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515418502203 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 94.895644742 57.8364921388 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.588235294 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7058823529 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179104542158 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462901978213 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615309275294 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10169406192 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742236322652 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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