The director of the large group of hospitals says that because of using ultraclean hand soap it may prevent the harmful bacteria in the hospitals but is assumption is flaws
First, the experiment is conducted in the controlled lab where the environment will be completely differ from the outside world and also there is statistical data mentioned in the above statement so we need some more information in order to state that the liquid hand soap is performing better. The director stated that the liquid soap showed good results in their hospital management but there is no proof that it may also show the same effective results in other hospitals management. Secondly, some liquid effect according to the temperature and surrounding as the controlled laboratory temperature will be at normal room temperature but in the real world temperatures and climate differ so it may not give efficient results in every region.
The director also stated that their hospitals showed fewer cases of patient infection because of using that ultraclean liquid hand wash, this statement may lead to many assumptions and also by this statement we can say that the director is not 100% sure because there may be many reasons like the patients may getting treated in other hospitals so that wise the patient in their hospital is reduced or the people during that climate may have been affected with any diseases or the patients in that city or town are being are following careful precautions in order to be aware of the bacteria or diseases. Even though we provide the ultra clean hand wash facility for the visitors and patients there is no guarantee that everyone will use it in order to prevent harmful bacteria.
Also, some patients may have some side effects in their body because of using some certain chemicals and that chemicals may be included in preparation of ultraclean soap and this leads to providing infection for the patients or visitors. For example if unaffected people use the same soap which is used by affected people there may be a chance of spreading their disease to unaffected people. The director also mentioned that there is 40% reduction of germs but he didn’t give the clear idea that in what climate conditions and temperature that results are produced and what are side effects of using that soap.
Finally, all assumptions he made was not 100% sure when compared to real world and also there is guarantee that it produces same results in all the hospitals and for all the people in the worktown in order to prove it best hand wash soap some more data and research information is need and we need capture the review of the people about that soap whether every likes it or dislikes it.
- The following appeared in a memo from the director of a large group of hospitals In a controlled laboratory study of liquid hand soaps a concentrated solution of extra strength UltraClean hand soap produced a 40 percent greater reduction in harmful bac 60
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2215 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.784 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.185 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.183 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...uid hand soap is performing better. The director stated that the liquid soap sho...
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...re is no proof that it may also show the same effective results in other hospital...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'hospitals'' or 'hospital's'?
Suggestion: hospitals'; hospital's
...ow the same effective results in other hospitals management. Secondly, some liquid effec...
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...other hospitals so that wise the patient in their hospital is reduced or the peo...
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...he patient in their hospital is reduced or the people during that climate may ha...
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...ents may have some side effects in their body because of using some certain chemi...
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... effects of using that soap. Finally, all assumptions he made was not 100% sur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 462.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87229437229 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55537150717 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41341991342 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 22.8473053892 223% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.647214567 57.8364921388 252% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 250.111111111 119.503703932 209% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.3333333333 23.324526521 220% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.70786347227 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211627439533 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100059867077 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695542368249 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15090473471 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774322963052 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.2 14.3799401198 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 48.3550499002 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 12.197005988 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.1389221557 201% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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