The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Smith Jones.
"In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones plans to build a multi-million dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses, and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville."
The given argument if flawed for a variety of reasons. Primarily, it makes the unwarranted assumption that a multi-million dollar subway system would solve traffic congestion, leading to better worker productivity and improved economy, without gathering reliable date. Therefore, rendering the argument invalid.
The government has not bothered to ascertain whether the public would be willing to use a subway system. Furthermore, whether these major downtown areas are where majority of traffic congestion takes place, has not been established. The argument would have been strengthened if the government provided reliable data of public's willingness to use a subway system and whether this system would indeed curb traffic congestion.Furthermore, if buses are more preferred by the public then the governement should focus on introducing more buses to solve the issue of inconsistent timings. Nevertheless, if the government still pursues the initiative of bulding a multi-million dollar subway system without gathering the required information, then this initiative would hurt the economy more rather than improving it.
Second unwarranted assumption made by the government is that of establishing a connection between safety and subway system. In other words, just because a mode of transportation has been changed does not guarantee absence of crime from that medium of transport. To subdue crimes on public transport the government should focus on installing CCTV security cameras, and introduce patrol guards at each station.
Third, the government makes the assumption of less traffic being commensurate with worker productivity. While, traffic can somewhat affect the productivity of a worker, the extent of this affect has not been established and therefore cannot be thought of as the sole attribute affecting productivity. Various other factors like upper management, company incentives, stability at home etc. also affect productivity.
Conclusively, the argument, by making several unwarranted assumptions has been redered, invalid.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Words: 300 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1711 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.703 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.009 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.746 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
...em would indeed curb traffic congestion.Furthermore, if buses are more preferred by the pub...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, while, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 299.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.89297658863 5.12650576532 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24250553231 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571906354515 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 80.4530504912 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.466666667 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12043981525 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386754416445 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471255479668 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0597549468956 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491162810888 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.3550499002 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.88 12.5979740519 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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