"The population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. During the summer, then, the town council of Balmer Island should decrease the maximum number of moped rentals allowed at each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day. This will significantly reduce the number of summertime accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. The neighboring island of Torseau actually saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents last year when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. To help reduce moped accidents, therefore, we should also enforce these limitations during the summer months."
A latter about moped accidents to the editor of the Bamler Island Gazette suggests that to reduced moped accident they should enforce limitations during summer months. However, there are many questions which are necessary to answer limitations during summer are justifiable or not.
The population doubles during summer months and because of that town council suggested decrease the maximum number of moped rentals. But if population increase drastically then there may be chance of people use moped or bicycle to travel around island. If they decrease number of moped then how they will travel is not given. Also how it will help if they decrease number of mopes and bicycle’s rental. Residents may buy new moped or second hand moped to travel. Author should provide accurate details about how reducing 50 mopes and bicycles per day to 30 will help to reduce number of accidents.
If people do not know how to drive then there may be a higher risk of accident even if they reduced moped and bicycle. Accidents also involved mopeds and pedestrians. If number of moped and bicycles were reduced then there will be more pedestrians and chance of accidents is also high. So, author fails to provide details which support their argument about decreasing number of moped and bicycle. Also, providing bicycles and moped to only licensed holders also decrease accidents. Thus, author should provide strong evidence.
Neighboring island of Torseau reduced 50 percent in moped accident last year. But author fails to provide details about how many people decreased in island of Torseau. All isla4nds are not similar in every way. Conditions of every island are different. Author should provide details about Torseau’s island and how Balmer and Torseau are similar. There are chances of number of resident decreased last year in island of Torseau and because of that there are reduction is accidents. Thus, author should provide more details and accurate information on island of Torseau.
So, suggestion about decreasing moped and bicycles help to reduce number of accident in Balmer’s island fails to provide accurate details which strengthen their assumptions. However, author should provide details on how reducing moped will help to reduce arguments. And author also fails to provide details about island of Toreasu and how this will help in balmer.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1931 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.095 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.38 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.792 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.958 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ped or bicycle to travel around island. If they decrease number of moped then how ...
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Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...then how they will travel is not given. Also how it will help if they decrease numbe...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27440633245 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53225033422 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.393139841689 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3887192532 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2916666667 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7916666667 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.125 5.70786347227 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352630544589 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123811553839 0.0743258471296 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754922146183 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223239027939 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715850278341 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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