The argument claims that decreasing the fund from firms to the public television will also reduce the number of people who will visit the museums in the city. Therefore, it is essential to increase the fund from this cmpanies to increase the number of vistiors to the museumes. Stated in this way the argument fails to mentions several factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is weak, unconvincing, and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that increasing the number of people how watch television programs related to arts have a direct realtionship with people who visit heritage places. This statment is a strech and non substantiated in any way. In many places around the world the heritage places it is work from tourists who come from different places or countries. therefore, it could be this pool from local area not taken from large population. This argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated from where the people who participate in this questionnaire.
Second, the argument claims that increasing the fund to these programs on television aslo can has a positive effect on museumes. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any statistical correlation between the fund on television and museumes visitor's in more periods in the history. It is possible if the firms increased the fund, the number of visitors may not change or decrease .If the argument had provided evidence that how this fund can affect on visitors by providing examples on certain places then the argument would have been a lot more convincing.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts, In order to assess the merits of a certain situation/decision, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 338 350
No. of Characters: 1688 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.288 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.994 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.801 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.487 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...tated in this way the argument fails to mentions several factors, on the basis of which ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ome from different places or countries. therefore, it could be this pool from local area ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...o these programs on television aslo can has a positive effect on museumes. This is ...
^^^
Line 5, column 425, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r of visitors may not change or decrease .If the argument had provided evidence th...
^^
Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...of visitors may not change or decrease .If the argument had provided evidence that...
^^
Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of visitors may not change or decrease .If the argument had provided evidence that...
^^
Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...rovided evidence that how this fund can affect on visitors by providing examples on certa...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12759643917 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96575327472 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495548961424 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0478525341 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.2 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0737636643328 0.218282227539 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0276273071993 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449186495417 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0431421547929 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027175900849 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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