Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author assumes that due to destroyed food, the Fly-Away pest Control Company’s service is terrible; Then, to return to Buzzoff for all pest control services is the best choice to save money. However, since there are lacking many pieces of evidence, the author’s recommendation is unreasonable.
To begin with, the author has to provide more evidence to support the relationship between bad pest control service of the Fly-Away Pest Control Company and destroyed food. It’s possible that other factors contributed destroyed food. For instance, destroyed food might have resulted from natural disaster; Since Palm City has irregular pest disaster per ten years, the destroyed food in Palm City last month just is an accident. Moreover, it is also likely that human factors caused destroyed food; Employees’ negligence might be the cause of destroyed food; Because employees forgot to close the door when going off work, the warehouse’ food will be damaged by pest definitely. Lacking evidence that links bad pest control service of the Fly-Away Pest Control Company and destroyed food, it is presumptuous to suggest that bad pest control service was responsible for destroyed food.
Further, the author needs to offer specific evidence to prove the analogy between warehouse in Wintervale and warehouse in Palm City. However, it is entirely possible that the condition of warehouse in Wintervale and warehouse in Palm City is totally different. First of all, since Wintervale has more stable environmental condition, Wintervale has less pest than Palm City; Then, Wintervale can use less pest control service than Palm City to reach a better affection. In short, without accounting for such possible differences between Palm City and Wintervale, the arguer cannot prove that the pest control service of the Buzzoff Pest Control Company is better than the pest control service of the Fly-Away Pest Control Company.
Even if the condition of Palm City and Wintervale is the same, further evidence is needed to suggest that the best means of saving money is to return to the pest control service of Buzzoff. Saving money is a factor relating to not only service feed but also performance. It is entirely possible that Buzzoff Pest Control Company’s service fee is higher than Fly-Away Pest Control Company’s service fee, and the performance of Buzzoff is lower than Fly-Away. Thus, choosing Buzzoff Pest Control Company is not a good choice for saving money.
To sum up, due to lacking many pieces of evidence, the author’s recommendation is unwarranted. If author can offer the cogent evidence to suggest that destroyed food does not result from other factors, Palm City’s condition is equal to Wintervale’s condition, and proving choosing Buzzoff company is the best method to save money, the recommendation will be more reasonable.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2328 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.139 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 152 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.682 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.425 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lating to not only service feed but also performance. It is entirely possible tha...
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Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is unwarranted. If author can offer the cogent evidence to suggest that destroye...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, as to, for instance, in short, first of all, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 453.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33112582781 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7522964218 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.399558498896 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4383674215 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.058823529 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6470588235 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450719934992 0.218282227539 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176109140867 0.0743258471296 237% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13049605205 0.0701772020484 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271823759093 0.128457276422 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124565822137 0.0628817314937 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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