Several recent studies have shown a link between health and stair usage. One recently completed study shows that people who live in stairs-only apartment buildings (that is, buildings without elevators) live an average of three years longer than do people who live in buildings with both elevators and stairs. A second study shows that elderly residents of buildings with elevators make, on average, twice as many visits to doctors each year as do residents of buildings without elevators. Furthermore, several doctor's offices are reporting that residents of stairs-only buildings scored higher than average on questionnaires administered to new patients, in which the patients were asked to rate several aspects of their own health (e.g., fitness,
sleep quality, susceptibility to injury, etc.). The clearest explanation for these findings is that the moderate daily exercise required of residents who must use the stairs instead of elevators increases people's health and longevity.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The prompt seeks to establish a clear connection between health and stair usage, and, in doing so, a few possible explanations have been proposed to support the reasoning. However, most of these reasons are specious as they cannot bee strongly associated with the assumption that increased stair usage improves the health of residents. As a result, there are contrasting explantions that can be posed to rival the explannations state. The main is that residents of building with stair visit the hospital less often. The purpose of this response is to propose alternative reasonings.
Firstly, the second explanation the elderly of residents with stairs visit the hospital more frequently can be countered by the realization that elevators make it easier for them to leave their apartments to visit the doctor; and return after . A pharmacist clerking her patient, a 75 year diabetic patient, was unable to frequently go foe his hospital blood glucose check-up because he lives in a story building with stairs. He complained that the stress of going up and down the stair is a the main discouragement from coming to the hospital to see the doctor. This counters the implied explanation of fewer hospital visits by residents with stairs.
Furthermore on increased access or inclinations to see the doctors, because resident with elevators visit the doctors for their hospital check-ups, they rarely come down with illnesses compared to residents with stairs. This accounts for the why new patients surveyed in the hospital are mostly residents with stairs. In addition, a study has shown that the constant stress of using the stair compound health problems of residents causing them to use the hosptals more frequently.
While it is would be capricious to jettison the effects of increase motility and moderate daily excerise in improve the health condition of residents. It can be considered also that generally, patients in appartments with elevators are more financial capable of taking care of their health needs as a result they have fewer reasons to visit the hospital on health basis whencompared to patients with stairs.
In summary, yes the role of the moderate daily exercise does have positive health effects, it the stairs usage cannot be the only reason for improved health of residents. Residents with stairs may mave more direct assess and inclination to see the doctors.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1964 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.101 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.71 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.182 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ts to visit the doctor; and return after . A pharmacist clerking her patient, a 75...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...tress of going up and down the stair is a the main discouragement from coming to the ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...tal visits by residents with stairs. Furthermore on increased access or inclinations to ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'why'?
Suggestion: why
...esidents with stairs. This accounts for the why new patients surveyed in the hospital a...
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Line 7, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntly. While it is would be capricious to jettison the effects of increase moti...
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Line 9, column 99, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stairs'' or 'stair's'?
Suggestion: stairs'; stair's
...es have positive health effects, it the stairs usage cannot be the only reason for imp...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, may, second, so, while, in addition, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22857142857 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77761891737 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511688311688 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3093306103 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.8125 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0625 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13795045237 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511740983073 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425312778084 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891724989223 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337815526462 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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