Several recent studies have shown a link between health and stair usage. One recently completed study shows that people who live in stairs-only apartment buildings (that is, buildings without elevators) live an average of three years longer than do people who live in buildings with both elevators and stairs. A second study shows that elderly residents of buildings with elevators make, on average, twice as many visits to doctors each year as do residents of buildings without elevators. Furthermore, several doctor's offices are reporting that residents of stairs-only buildings scored higher than average on questionnaires administered to new patients, in which the patients were asked to rate several aspects of their own health (e.g., fitness, sleep quality, susceptibility to injury, etc.). The clearest explanation for these findings is that the moderate daily exercise required of residents who must use the stairs instead of elevators increases people's health and longevity.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In a recent magazine, it was stated that People with the apartment’s in stairs only building tend to live a healthier and longer lives than compared to the ones living in a building with an elevator as well, i.e. residents of a building with no elevator experience health issues less frequently than to those having elevator as an option to commute. In order to support this thought, author quoted three supporting statements but in order to evaluate the argument first, we need to answer these two questions.
Firstly, we are not told about the reason for the residents of a building with an elevator for their visit to the doctor. We cannot judge on the basis that people who visit the doctor more often are unhealthier than the one who isn’t. As for example, A person could have his routine check-up scheduled and on the other hand, it could be a case that a person with only stairs as an option commute couldn’t help himself to visit the doctor's reason being no elevator present. Hence, this supporting statement by the author does not stand strong in supporting the argument.
Secondly, as far as the questionnaire is concerned we never know if a resident of a building with an elevator was interviewed or not, and if only a few people were questioned. For Example, if a few people of a building are asked some random questions about their health, that cannot be an answer to the whole building.
Hence, the assumptions made by the author are clearly flawed and does not stand grounds. If the author is able to answer the unstated assumptions asked in the passage above, an evaluation can be done.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 284 350
No. of Characters: 1293 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.105 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.553 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.516 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.858 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.424 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...we need to answer these two questions. Firstly, we are not told about the reaso...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and strong in supporting the argument. Secondly, as far as the questionnaire is...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, as for, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1332.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 282.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72340425532 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62000828977 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507092198582 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5430597768 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.2 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 5.70786347227 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286443301869 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983451683133 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110748829116 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163644302616 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112681000995 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 98.500998004 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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