SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville prove that Corporateville is a superior place to live then Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp’s current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The author states that the decision made by Supercrop of moving its headquarters from Middleburg to Corporatevllie is the best one. The author goes on to present some reasons based on which he made this conclusion. But the author fails to present some key factors that are used for evaluating his assertions. The author doesn’t provide any evidence for his reasoning, and instead, he goes on to make some assumptions for his conclusion. So, this argument by the author lacks the basic factors, needed for the strengthening of the author’s conclusion.
Firstly, the author states that as there is a surge in the number of homeowners in Corporatevlie it’s a better place to live. This reasoning is flawed because the author didn't present any data cited for proving his reasoning. To illustrate this, if there is an increase in the number of people moving to a place, doesn't necessarily mean that it is a better place to live than other cities, as people might coming from a city which doesn’t provide facilities for a good living. The author assumes that the increase in the homeowners makes it a better place to live than Corporatevllie. This assertion could have been strengthened by mentioning the reasons for the surge in the homeowners and the comparison between the two cities.
Secondly, the author assumes that, a surge in number of homeowners in Corporateville makes it a superior place to live than Middlesburg. The author’s assumption is flawed, because surge in a city doesn’t necessarily mean that it has the highest surge among all the cities. For example, If there is an article, stating that there is a surge in petrol rate in a city A, doesn’t explicitly state that city A has the highest petrol surge among all other cities. If the author would have mentioned that, the surge in homeowners in Corporatvellie is higher than Supercorp, would have strengthened his assertion that, Corporateville is a superior place to live.
Finally, the author fails to provide the basic elements for strengthening his reasoning, as people use these elements for evaluating an argument. The author fails to answer, why does an increase in surge makes Corporatevllie a better place to live than Supercrop? Is the surge in homeowners in Supercorp lesser than Corporatevllies? The author might have given some examples that strengthen his assertions like data establishing a correlation between surge in homeowners and the quality of living or comparison of surges between the two cities.
Overall, the argument is flawed with no proper evidence for the reasoning. It lacks the basic understanding of the reasoning, by making unnecessary assumptions about the decision made by the Corporetevilla.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2199 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.898 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.953 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.541 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... reasoning is flawed because the author didnt present any data cited for proving his ...
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Line 3, column 319, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...the number of people moving to a place, doesnt necessarily mean that it is a better pl...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...comparison between the two cities. Secondly, the author assumes that, a sur...
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Line 7, column 488, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had mentioned'?
Suggestion: had mentioned
...e among all other cities. If the author would have mentioned that, the surge in homeowners in Corpor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 443.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19187358916 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13987776859 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.3769751693 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1717175336 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196010441496 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07914084622 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799434781603 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112572548916 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864717288389 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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