SuperCrop
The author claims that Supercrop moving its headquarters from Milldville to Corporateville is the best decision for the Supercrop. To justify this recommendation, the author reasons that, the taxes in Corporateville is cheaper than that of Middleville will make Corporateville a cheaper solution for its employees. However, after carful scrutiny of evidence revels that, it provides little support to the author's recommadation. The author fails to mention several facts, on the basis of which this argument can be evaluated.
First of all, the author readily assumes that the survey conducted among the company is substantive enough to influence this big of a decision. This is merely an assumption made without any solid grounds. For example, for all we know, most of the survey participants are above the age of 50, this will make sense for the result which shows that the employees prefer the countryside to the urban city. While 60% of SuperCrops employees are under the age bracket of 30, it is unlikely to see a result like this. Considering this above point, without the actual facts about this survey, this evidence significantly weakens the author's conclusion.
Secondly, the author also points out that, by comparing the taxes, he came to the conclusion that the living expense in Corporateville would be cheaper than that of MiddleVille. This is again a weak and unsupported claim. To illustrate further, taxes is not the only significant factor when it comes to the living expense. Although the taxes in Corporateville is cheaper than MiddleVille, author fails to consider other factors which could influence the living expense of their employees. For example, due to the recent surge in the homeowners in Corporateville, it has made the rent for houses in Corporateville to be very expensive than the MiddleVille. Since Corporateville is not as developed as MiddleVille, their transportation system is not very effective. This will again burn a hole in the employees pocket. With the above implications, the author's assumption does not hold water.
And finally, despite all the above point, the argument still leaves us with a lot of unwarrented questions like how the SuperCrop is going to make the shift in the recession time? How this shift of their HQ is going to affect their exsisting clients? How is SuperCrop came to a conclusion that CroporateVille is much safer than the MiddleVille? Without convincing answers for the above questions, the reader is left with the impression that the claims made by the author is more of a wishful thinking than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerbly flawed due to many unwarrented assumptions by the author. If the author is able to provide the evidence of the stated above and perhaps conduct a better research study, then it will be possible to determine whether moving to Corporateville is the best decision.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2388 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.988 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.609 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.096 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.391 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 553, Rule ID: ACTUAL_EXPERIENCE[1]
Message: Use simply 'facts'.
Suggestion: facts
...nsidering this above point, without the actual facts about this survey, this evidence signif...
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Line 3, column 625, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...this evidence significantly weakens the authors conclusion. Secondly, the author als...
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Line 5, column 851, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ocket. With the above implications, the authors assumption does not hold water. And ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17510548523 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07553622503 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476793248945 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6963457601 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.652173913 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6086956522 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113430093849 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433290230609 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101503777999 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752733794264 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714679413105 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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