The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of human resources claims that implementing electronic monitoring systems on all company computers will prevent employees from wasting time and increase overall profit. This argument lies on a foundation of unstated assumptions which if unwarranted could lead to an even worse work ethic at Climpson.
The first major assumption is the fact that the cause for employees wasting time and the loss of overall profit margins, is because of employees abusing their computer privileges with personal activities. If the amount of time wasted by employees does not occur while using the computer, rather by water cooler chat or by making private phone calls, implementing an electronic monitoring system would have very little effect on fostering a better work ethic.
If the statement were true that employees were wasting their time on the computer, there lies an underlying assumption that these activities are being done on their company work computer rather than a personal computer. In this case any software installed onto the company work computers would not stop the employee from wasting time.
Implementing an electronic monitoring system under these assumptions may prove to be extremely damaging to Climpson office atmosphere. Employees that do not waste copious amounts of time surfing the internet may feel that their privacy is being infringed upon may feel spied upon. Working under these types of circumstances may itself reduce the amount of overall time spent working and the effort put into their work.
Before implementing such a draconian measure by installing electronic monitoring system on all company computers, it is necessary to collect data on how employees use working hours to conduct private affairs. Whether it occurs through computers use or by other means.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Words: 283 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1502 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.307 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.671 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.486 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.694 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...oundation of unstated assumptions which if unwarranted could lead to an even worse...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 283.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42756183746 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71073795091 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575971731449 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.774091276 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.636363636 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7272727273 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.27272727273 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201816288086 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889003787979 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493824577639 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130005996781 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371618004398 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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