The author of the article argues that opening of a café in Monarch book store would attract more customers. However, this conclusion is based upon certain assumption which if unwarranted would render the forecast worthless.
It is proposed that children book section should be discontinued to make space for Café. To support his claim author cites a recent national survey which indicates decline in percentage of population under the age of ten. Since the data conveys that percentage of population under ten is decreasing it may be plausible that their absolute numbers are increasing. Also it might be possible that the percentage of children reading books have grown, increasing the potential customer base. The cited survey is at national level, it does not warrant that the local children population is changing in the same direction. We need more information about the change in demography at the local level to draw any conclusion.
Moreover parents accompany children when they shop for books, discontinuing the children section would diminish this existing customer pool of parents. We need to estimate the potential loss of customers by discontinuing children’s books and the gain through opening up a café to make any informed decision.
Regal books opened up a café in their store last year but the effects of this step on customer base are not mentioned. Even if the customer base of Regal books increased, it does not warrant a similar effect for Monarch books. The situation in Regal Books could have been very different. They might had additional space allowing them to open café without discontinuing any section of books. Their customer base can be very different, plausibly comprising more of adults, who like to prefer coffee while reading.
Conclusively, author’s recommendation lacks persuasive arguments to support his claim. With each enumerated argument being potentially unwarranted, the conclusion which is based upon this inconclusive argument will not be tenable.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.277777777778 0.25644967241 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.184210526316 0.15541462614 119% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0789473684211 0.0836205057962 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0380116959064 0.0520304965353 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0438596491228 0.0272364105082 161% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.12865497076 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0672514619883 0.0416121511921 162% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85815910435 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0233918128655 0.026700313972 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00584795321637 0.001811407834 323% => OK
Determiners: 0.093567251462 0.113004496875 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0292397660819 0.0255425247493 114% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0146198830409 0.0127820249294 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2022.0 2731.13054187 74% => OK
No of words: 316.0 446.07635468 71% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 6.39873417722 6.12365571057 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.57801047555 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.382911392405 0.378187486979 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.319620253165 0.287650121315 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.243670886076 0.208842608468 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151898734177 0.135150697306 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85815910435 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 207.018472906 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560126582278 0.469332199767 119% => OK
Word variations: 59.9902407716 52.1807786196 115% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5882352941 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.5918939017 57.7814097925 43% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.941176471 141.986410481 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.470588235294 0.724660767414 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 3.58251231527 279% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 50.5502606106 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.78021978022 1.8405768891 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318688510644 0.441005458295 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.115006126509 0.135418324435 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0902661508528 0.0829849096947 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.550887752048 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119659559035 0.147661913831 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121613039658 0.193483328276 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696577900637 0.0970749176394 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.239246352126 0.42659136922 56% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0986508589008 0.0774707102158 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178356472568 0.312017818177 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903195181154 0.0698173142475 129% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.82512315271 207% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 10.0 2.82389162562 354% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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