In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions.
Some people insist that beginners have better potential to bring crucial contributions to a field as they have a fresh point of view. However, I do not agree with that. I insist that majority of important contributions would be made by experts not beginners.
Firstly, experts know well about a field. To be specific, experts are those who have studied or worked in a specific field for a long time and have accumulated vast knowledge in the field. In other words, they know well about current issues and previous attempts to resolve the issues. Thus, they will be able to set a desirable goal to improve current situations and suggest possible solutions that have not been tried yet. For this reason, I believe experts would have better chances to make significant contributions to a field when compared to beginners.
Secondly, experts have great insight into a field. Experts have handled or observed varied situations in a field. It means they are aware of the list of possible situations and manuals to manage them. With this knowledge, even if they face a new accident, they will be able to easily understand the problematic situation and come up with possible solutions based on their previous experiences. Therefore, experts will make significant contributions to many fields, especially where agility is important.
It is fact that there were beginners who have made significant contributions in a field. However, for general cases, I believe that experts will have better potential to significantly contribute to a field for the reasons I abovementioned.
- In an attempt to improve highway safety Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways But this effort has failed the number of accidents has not decreased and based on reports by the highway patrol man 70
- In business education and government it is always appropriate to remain skeptical of new leaders until those leaders show that they are worthy of trust Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In devel 83
- The effectiveness of a country s leaders is best measured by examining the well being of that country s citizens Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be s 70
- Twenty years ago Dr Field a noted anthropologist visited the island of Tertia Using an observation centered approach to studying Tertian culture he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by the 50
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting you 58
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1314.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 256.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1328125 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93640895629 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 215.323595506 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5234375 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8890520391 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0666666667 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226988622942 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096370527017 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712727578321 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162663549515 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224997769414 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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