The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.’
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
We live in a society that is growing and developing at a rapid pace.To survive in this ever gowing world and to be better than other individuals ,competition is one of the key paramters.However competion is not of the utmost importance when it comes to the topic of leadership.Leadership requires an individual to have deep understanding of their teams and not be in a competition with the team.Thus for an individual to become a responsible and good leader ,they need to instill in themselves a sense of cooperation and not competition.
Most jobs in the current world situation require individuals to come together and work in teams.Government,industry or any other private jobs work in teams with a leader to show way to the team.The leader needs to have proper understanding about their team members .The leader needs to understand that for work to be done effectively ,all team members must cooperate with each other and also with the leader to understand proactively what steps need to be taken.For example ,a company is facing a huge business challenge financially.The team consists of a leader and other few team members.In such a situation the leader needs to cooperate with his team members to find out exactly what the problem is and what soultion can they come up with.If the leader encourages a sense of competition among his team members then the team will never come up with a proper solution to fix the problems and they will be competing among themselves to come up on top.
In the current world,since childhood ,society goads on children to develop a sense of competition to stand tall among their peers.What the society fails to understand is that ,further in the child's life when they start contributing to the society maybe as a leader or a team member ,they need to work and cooperate with their peers and not beat their peers in a competition.A classic example of this ideology is any nation's government.A government generally has a leader who combines with his assembly members to make the nation a better place.When we look at the current status of nations around the planet,we find out that nations which have friendly cooperative leaders who work shoulder to shoulder with their team are better developed nations than a nation whose leader only wants to maintain his position and win the competition.
Having haid that,competion sometimes take the front seat in some of the society issues.Some situations require individuals to compete with each other rather than cooperate with each other.Most of the provate jobs in the current world are prime examples of such situations.For an individual to0 get noticed and to make their life a better lived ife ,an individual needs to try to beat his peers and stand tall among them.A sense of cooperation is good,but the cooperation should be limited to the extant that it does not hurt an individual's personal growth.In short competition along with restrained cooperation is the way to go in such a job situation.
Thus one can conclude that,for an individual to contribute effectively to his work duties and to get the job done,he needs to have a sense of cooperation inculcated into him.Thus the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is to develop a sense of cooperation and not competition.However ,there a certain situation where an individual needs to show a sense of competion with restrained cooperation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, thus, for example, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 103.0 58.6224719101 176% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2841.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 571.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97548161121 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16038093324 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416812609457 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 891.9 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 114.0 23.0359550562 495% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 192.238393668 60.3974514979 318% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 568.2 118.986275619 478% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 114.2 23.4991977007 486% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.8 5.21951772744 303% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 52.0 7.80617977528 666% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135846753836 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102450553192 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681088270959 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102450553192 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681088270959 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 59.1 14.1392134831 418% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -44.23 48.8420337079 -91% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 20.3 7.92365168539 256% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 47.8 12.1743820225 393% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.79 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.08 8.38706741573 144% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.0 11.8971910112 269% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 47.6 11.2143820225 424% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 48.0 11.7820224719 407% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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