The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Everybody has their own specific opinions regarding politics and leadership. Walk into a random bar at evening and you will encounter the phenomenon of the "bar philosopher", that person that will resolve all struggles in the world with his/her reasoning. Some do this by cooperation with the people surrounding them in this hypothetical situation, others just do it on their own. This banal event that happens on the corner of every street in every town raises the question for future generations if we should prepare them for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation or competition. Although a fine balance between both seems needed, in the end cooperation might be the more important value.
To begin with, cooperation is most of the time the more difficult quality of the two to teach, however it may give the biggest reward. Cooperation comes forth out of empathy, and by creating bonds between yourself and other individuals, they will feel that same empathy for you. In a society where jobs are getting more and more specific, this quality is extremely valuable. If you are for example good at something and you collaborate with other people who can make use of your specific quality, you will be able to count on them if you need their specific area of knowledge in one of your problems. Since most problems are getting more and more complex, by cooperation one can attain more and better results than by working individually.
Although the previous argument is valid, there is an aspect about competition that seems to be forgotten, which is that it brings out the best in people. By promoting competition, you can let people develop themselves to their full capacity. Out of psychological expreiments there has been proven that if 1 men needs to pull a rope with a weight of 1 ton attached to it, he will pull almost twice as hard than if he is set into a group of 5 men to pull a rope with 5 ton attached to it. Therefore cooperation might introduce the habit to slack of and give a lesser result. If one regards it this way, it is clear that competition gains an edge on cooperation.
However all this is true, the most important factor that comes to play is of course modern society itself. Our society is nowadays so complicated in all its problems that working alone is almost impossible, except for the very few geniuses out there. Therefore, the worries of today and tomorrow should be tackled by a group of people rather than one. And even if you put a group together of people who are extremely competitive, they won't work together as good as a group that learned how to cooperate. Therefore cooperation can reach more in this society than an individual can by being competitive even if the group is slacking of as was reasoned in the previous paragraph.
The conclusion can be made that a fine balance between competition and cooperation needs to be found, with an edge given to cooperation. Although there are certain points that can be made for competition, in our society it will be more important to prepare the young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, since the problems that need to be tackled are becoming too complex to handle alone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: However,
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, except for, for example, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 58.6224719101 145% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2673.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 559.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78175313059 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80235398796 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457960644007 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 845.1 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8954679067 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.5 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4090909091 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233387641157 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631472584288 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823105639246 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136723646531 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063423008414 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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