The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
People have different views about how a government should prime its young generation for leadership in the future. While some people may argue that it would be better for the youth to be accustomed to a competitive environment, I believe that learning cooperative skills are of more efficacy to achieve this objective.
First, students should be able to achieve spectacular career success before promoting to an elevated social position. I have not any notion of an underdog politician, or businessman who has occupied an important social location later in his life. Moreover, a dexterity of well-adjusting in groups is one of the eminent qualities of a successful person incontrovertibly. For example, Steve Jobs, the founder of Apple company, was well-known for his cooperative skills long before he could introduce his breakthrough technology organization of Apple to the world. Another example, the story of some Polish mathematician who possessed the highest intelligence quotient (IQ) in the world, even more than Albert Einstein, but was suffering unemployment most of her life because, according to a rejecting employer, she was so laconic and shy that there were no hope for her to become successful in group activities.
Along with that, one should consider the essence of today world problems. In fact, if some one were a leader, he will be responsible to address some problems of nation-wide importance. Such problems including recondite economical situations, international conflicts, and internal political catastrophes call for not only one kind of expertise but to a broad range of various fields contributing together. Neither politicians nor economists are not able to address societal issues individually. The should share their knowledge and experience, and thus, cooperative skills are of the greatest importance for the tomorrow leaders.
In conclusion, although some assert that a competitive milieu is more adequate for the youth to become better leaders in the future, I, personally, believe that cooperative skills has more effect, and governments should focus on them.
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. 70
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do. 73
- Loyalty can be detrimental too. 50
- Rules concerning youth are too strict (TPO 52) 66
- Should governments invest in arts more than sports or not? 63
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 324.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47222222222 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16730283842 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62037037037 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6392561805 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.384615385 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137419907141 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468124451521 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574828706856 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919526831504 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497570611223 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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