The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The author here is claiming that the youth of the society should be prepared by instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition for leadership in fields of government or industry. For the growth of the society and enhancement of the human resources, I strongly believe in this claim. The society will be benefited the most if the leader is cooperative and understanding rather than avarice and arrogant.
First of all, everyone is taught to have a competitive spirit right from their childhood. In primary and secondary schools, students are taught to compete in various activities and also in academics. This approach may be useful for the students in their early years. But in later years this kind of attitude will not always prove to be fruitful. Some students would be adversely affected by this and would turn out to be intractable and non compliant. If such people went on to become the leaders of the industry or the government, then the society could be in a dilemma.
Secondly regarding the industries, people always prefer the products of the company which is primarily concerned with what people want rather than constantly berating the rival companies. For instance, a soft drink company should focus on the type of drink the people would prefer rather than selling an inferior drink at lower price just to surpass the sales of rival brand. Also the employees prefer a working environment which is more affable. Such industries can only be exist if the leader or founders of the company are cooperative.
On the contrary, sometimes a competitive spirit is also beneficial. Two rival political parties or two rival companies would always try to better than one another and come up with a more beneficial situation which could result in burgeoning of the society. But that kind of strategy is empirical and there is no definite proof that it will improve the conditions of the society.
Further to bolster my argument, the competitive spirit may also put a stress on the environment. To prove themselves the industries or political parties would find new ways to exhaust natural resources. For instance, to make a better car a company might add metal to improve sales. Such strategy would rarefy many resources.
Finally to conclude, the youth of the society are the light of the future and the development of the society depends on them. Thus, it is of crucial importance to teach the youth a sense of the cooperation which would lead to peaceful and compliant leaders.
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Suggestion: Finally,
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'first of all', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220264317181 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.138766519824 0.157235817809 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0925110132159 0.0880659088768 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0638766519824 0.0497285424764 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0198237885463 0.0444667217837 45% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125550660793 0.12292977631 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0264317180617 0.0406280797675 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74866296137 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0330396475771 0.030933414821 107% => OK
Particles: 0.00440528634361 0.0016655270985 264% => OK
Determiners: 0.129955947137 0.0997080785238 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0396475770925 0.0249443105267 159% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011013215859 0.0148568991511 74% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2505.0 2732.02544248 92% => OK
No of words: 421.0 452.878318584 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95011876485 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363420427553 0.366273622748 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.273159144893 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.199524940618 0.200843997647 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.137767220903 0.132149295362 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74866296137 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 219.290929204 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496437054632 0.48968727796 101% => OK
Word variations: 55.1058869743 55.4138127331 99% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.1363636364 23.380412469 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3864550328 59.4972553346 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.863636364 141.124799967 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1363636364 23.380412469 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.772727272727 0.674092028746 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 46.4522781257 51.4728631049 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.67326732673 1.64882698954 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380752110094 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.11281155083 0.123202303941 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0881151324818 0.077325440228 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.571109464958 0.547984918172 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161510843908 0.149214159877 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139974725296 0.161403998019 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104346929087 0.0892212321368 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.309342827213 0.385218514788 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0770971262761 0.0692045440612 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23561826846 0.275328986314 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918204754912 0.0653680567796 140% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.