The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
A society has many responsibilities, but one of the most important duties is to raise leaders in the future generations in order to continue a successful and thriving community. While many societies are competition based, there are both beneficial and harmful effects that competition can have on young people and whole communities. Instead, enforcing a sense of cooperation may encourage young people to be more honest, compassionate, and dutiful leaders. In this essay, I will explore the benefits of creating cooperative leaders, the risks of cooperation instead of competition, and the importance of societies finding a balance between the cooperation and competition to support the innovation and compassionate leaders and members of society.
Instilling a sense of cooperation may produce stronger leaders as it teaches people to work with others instead of against them. Additionally, while leaders must have a sense of intellect and knowledge of the field, they may benefit from hearing ideas from others and facing decisions with a team, rather than on their own. Raising leaders that are more focused on cooperation care about others and their community more than leaders who are focused on competition and beating out others. The best leaders in government, technology, healthcare, and other major industries are all focused on producing the best results by working together with others in order to achieve more and to produce policies and products that benefit more people.
While there are many strengths of cooperation-focused leaders, it is also necessary to address possible downsides of focusing too heavily on cooperation and too little on competition. There may be lack of innovation without a driving competition between individuals or companies. Additionally, some leaders may too focused on making everybody happy and become a "people-pleaser" instead of making decisions that are best for the whole company or population. Many modern societies are focused heavily on competition because it pushes people to be better and work harder, and many great inventions and ideas were created by people in competition with others.
However, while there are some limitations to instilling a sense of cooperation instead of competition in young people, these limitations may be overcome by creating a balance of competition and cooperation, where people still feel the need to work hard and be innovative, while not struggling with the more intense harms of competition.
Competition may lead to stressful situations, burn-out, or intimidation, which are all concerns for many societal and work communities. Invoking a focus on cooperation with a balance of competition may prove to be the most beneficial for the whole company and for the individual workers and leaders, as it leads to both innovative and compassionate people.
Ultimately, societies will benefit from instilling cooperation and humanistic characteristics in their future leaders over focusing on competition. There are possible risks that may emerge when focusing too heavily on one instead of another, whether it be stress and burn-out from competition or lack of innovation from cooperation, so finding a balance to cooperation and competition may prove to be the best solution. However, a community focused on caring for others and doing what is best for everyone will create happier, more satisfied people, which is the ultimate goal of most successful leaders.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 42.0 12.9106741573 325% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2937.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 534.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26849417743 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408239700375 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 943.2 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.8876976769 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.166666667 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6666666667 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197710114854 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749025174421 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438869288697 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115889793644 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198761413331 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 48.8420337079 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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