The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
A society forms civilization that breeds uniform conduct and justice, and so it is imperative that the young people who are going to take leadership roles and ensure civilized conduct to understand the fundamental paradigm that the society is build on "sense of belonging", cooperation and growth which harms no one and conduct that supports justice. Thus the statement that in any field, to prepare young people for the leadership roles a sense of cooperation rather than competition is of utmost importance.
In his book Stephen Covey states, after interviewing several organizations and leaders, that -" for an organization to grow successfully there is a need of interdependence and cooperation". Furthermore, he suggests that people who think win/lose, are competing and will only go so far but to actually succeed in any field be it government, industry, information, one has to build relationships and trust which leads to a strategy of win/win. Thus, sense of cooperation will for the long-term prepare the future leaders. Leaders in its own meaning is someone who takes the whole team or organization to success and growth which cannot be done if there is no sense of cooperation and only competition.
Industries and government works for the people, any organization can grow only when each part of the system is cooperated to move in the same direction and any negative direction cannot help achieve the desired goal. for example, in an interview Stephen Covey says that while working with many industries that cannot flourish and do not understand why their is no paradigm for a sense of mutual trust, he saw that new leaders are basing their work on competition that is not a bad thing but it breeds them in a way that even in the workplace they were not able to cooperate and give their ideology up for the sake of the company's success because their success was not ensured, which being ironical that if cooperation breeds leaders to company's success it will be the leaders success as well.
To sum, cooperation builds trust and mutual understanding, and competition breeds egotists who ensure self success first, which is a good thing when you're working alone, but in an organization the team can success together only.
- government should offer university education to any student that has been admitted but cannot afford the tuition. 83
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 58
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 372.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08602150538 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01471513445 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497311827957 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 23.0359550562 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 135.562841334 60.3974514979 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 210.222222222 118.986275619 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.3333333333 23.4991977007 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.21951772744 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211032848781 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099092509993 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756198552205 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120952763938 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798567143396 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.2 14.1392134831 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.86 48.8420337079 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 12.1743820225 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.13 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 11.2143820225 164% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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