"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The reason behind any industry which is on the road to success,should purely be credited to the person who is leading it. ie. leader. Leadership is one of the most important aspects of the running the company and can only be achieved with an individual who has both experience in technical and management side of things. Cooperation and coordination are two major aspects involved in leadership. The best way for an organization to prepare its younger generation in leadership is by making them understand how important it is to cooperate than compete.
Any industry or government organization works properly, when all the members in the organization coordinate with each another and move together as one unit. Without proper coordination among various different departments in the organization, there will be many holes left in the management and it will lead to chaos in the workplace. Understanding how to cooperate with one another in the workplace is one of the major aspects of any leader. He should be able to guide his team to achieve milestones which can only be done through proper coordination.
A leader is someone who is chosen to represent a particular group/ organization to under whom many employees work coherently to achieve various goals. For example, Bill Gates is a great leader and knows how to make full use of the employees under him and hence is the CEO of the Microsoft. He didnt become CEO only based on only his creative mind or innovation, but also on the ability to guide people under him to achieve various deliverables. This way, he is able to attain success and hence one of the most reknown personalities in the world.
When a group / organization elects a leader based on votes, it is primarily based on two major reasons. One being his technical skills and the other being his managerial skills. When he is elected as the leader, it is understood that the employees who work under him will be able to thrive and give out the maximum potential stored in them. This primariy depends on the degree upto how the people are willing to coordinate with him. A leader should be someone with whom people would like to cooperate freely. Sometimes, having competetion in the work place can also greatly benefit the workforce. Employees push each other to their very limits so that they can stand on top of each and during this process they grow exponentially. Hence, having competition in the workplace can also lead to grow of the employees and maintaining a perfect degree of competition so that employees dont go overboard is another important aspect of the leader.
Hence, from all the points listed above, I strongly support that the younger generation needs to be instilled with the fact that coordination is much of utmost importance in organization.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , should
...industry which is on the road to success,should purely be credited to the person who is...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...d hence is the CEO of the Microsoft. He didnt become CEO only based on only his creat...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...degree of competition so that employees dont go overboard is another important aspec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, still, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94904458599 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87856217375 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475583864119 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9152730787 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.09523809524 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0754726398541 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260495479713 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038737097287 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0474317066877 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445309297214 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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