The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Cooperation is a valuable character trait that must be taught and encouraged. Competition is a natural character quality that although useful, can become dangerous. Rather than competition, society should instill a sense of cooperation in young people.
Emphasizing a spirit of cooperation allows individuals to grow as they take into account different perspectives. This breeds success in the occupational world. Cooperation requires mindfulness and compromise as people learn to accept that those around us do not view the world as we do. As children openly experience the differences in individuals they are surrounded by they adopt new perspectives and come to understand that another's way of living is as equally valuable, and humbly recognize change might be necessary for their own lives. Think about the owner of a company insisting their thoughts are more valuable than the rest of the companies. This corporation would realistically, fail. Cooperation fosters growth and growth helps lead develop well-rounded leaders. Children must be taught cooperation at a young age so that they embrace this concept in the future.
In society today, a competitive drive is vital to win; however, daily life goes beyond beating the competition. Competition teaches us perseverance, determination, and encourages us to reach our potential, but if not tempered with humility, it can lead to selfishness. For example, Steve Jobs, an incredible inventor and leader, had a team of scientists and technologists challenging his thoughts and pushing him to do his best. If he would have disregarded their professional opinions, his designs and visions may never have left the planning stage. Similarly, children need to be raised with an attitude that accepts and embodies the perspectives of others to reach their full potential. Behind every successful leader, is a team offering different perspectives and views waiting to be acknowledged and put into practice through cooperation.
Cooperation must be instilled in youth. Nurturing a cooperative spirit in children allows for them to grow to become well-rounded and considerate leaders who accept the viewpoints of others and use them to foster growth in their own lives.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 436, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had disregarded'?
Suggestion: had disregarded
...s and pushing him to do his best. If he would have disregarded their professional opinions, his design...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 343.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51895043732 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17279670015 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588921282799 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6141023616 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6315789474 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26315789474 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0985158231387 0.243740707755 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284662094077 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406139203273 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0693348004878 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237768984484 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.