The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In today's world, young people are getting more competative as ever, from univerisity exams to corporate world there is so much competition, everyone needs to be competative else they will be left behind. However, I'm in support with the author that young people should learn to have a sense of cooperation rather than competition. I will provide two reasons why i agree with the prompt.
What is cooperation? - Cooperation means a person should be accepting of other's believe, or they should respect other's opinions, especiplly when a person is in a leadership position. For instance, Mahatam Gandhi is one person comes in mind when we talk about cooperation, he was totally against the idea of competition amongst indians, because he believed if we got stuck with competiting with each other then we will never be able to come together as a country to fight against bitish empire. So, a sense of cooperation is very important in today's youth.
Let's take another example, Today most of the science discoveris are made by people of different background in cooperation with each other, if you go back just 50 years ago, there was huge competition amongsts the scienctist, they used to be very reluctant to share their idea or research with other researches. because of this a lot of good work which could have happened in those decades got delayed. So young people should learn from this.
Some people say world has become very competative and young people should also be competative to be a successful leaders, I would like to say to them, with a sense of cooperation, a person can be a leader but he can't be succesful. A person can only be a suceesful leader if he learns from other people and respect their believe.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rns from other people and respect their believe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 295.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86440677966 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75067019856 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572881355932 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.0026846708 60.3974514979 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.583333333 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152881708507 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568757258743 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397680807374 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956978057573 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146870629145 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.