The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition.
The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is indeed by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition. Young people are often inspired by their surroundings and how everyone around them is responding to a particular thing. They tend to look at older people or their peers, and learn how to do work something out. From the way others resolve an issue to how others react to someone's emotions, young people adapt a lot of things that they see on a regular basis. Which is why it is necessary to be careful of the environment a young child is being brought up in.
When it comes to leadership skills, if young people work as a team they will be more aware of how others are treating an obstacle and they will evaluate their own method if it was better or if they could have been more efficient. The problem resolving strategy is developed by trial and error. If someone is put in a competition, they will only know if they failed or succeeded. They won't be able to figure out what was their opponent's strategy for tackling the problem, in fact, it will take a person more time to figure out an efficient strategy which could actually help them succeed. Which will again, lead to trial and error and if their oppponent does it better again, they will keep wasting their time in analysing their methods. Whereas in teamwork, everyone utilises a different strategy and all the other members are completely aware of what everyone is doing, this makes it easier to pick the best solution for a problem and then everyone can analyse their way of approach easily. Not only does this save time but it also develops a positive atmosphere within the team and this helps everyone to work with a clear, optimistic mindset.
When you work with people, you learn how everyone thinks and you learn their emotional response to a lot of things. This helps in making an individual more considerate towards others' feelings and how they can handle them. This skill is one of the most important skills of leadership. A leader is supposed to know how everyone will react to a particular situation and how those responses can be alleviated. Being more empathetic and aware of people's emotions will help a leader make better and wise decisions. The crowd should love their leader and a leader should know how to gain a crowd's attention.
If young people are prepared for leadership by making them work in a team, it will definitely create better leaders in the coming generation. Working as a team is always better than working alone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'crowds'' or 'crowd's'?
Suggestion: crowds'; crowd's
... and a leader should know how to gain a crowds attention. If young people are prepar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, so, still, then, whereas, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67248908297 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52057096102 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46943231441 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2000691881 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261017924078 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946636461819 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.206159389746 0.0758088955206 272% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194700708276 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175167766338 0.0667264976115 263% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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