The best way for society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
preparing young people to be great leaders has always been one of the most important issues in the society due to its effect on the development of that society .there are many important elements in preparing young people. but which element is the most important one. Some believe that leaders should be trained to have sense of cooperation not cometition, and that is the most important element. so they think that the best way to prepare young people is instilling a sense of cooperation in them and killing the competion sense.
Of course one of the most important thing to do is instilling a cooperation sense in young people, not competion. when young people are trained to cooperate with each other when they become the leader of a company they will use other companies to flourish and also they help the others to burgeon. so there will be a more convinient conditions for companies to advance together. Despite to cooperation sense, competition sense will make leaders to think only of their company and do whatever they can to advance their company, even hurting the other companies. so with killing the competition sense and also instilling sense of cooperation in young people, the society will eventually advance.
but is it the most important element? I mean are all the other elements less important? Lets take a leader of a company who believe that his company should cooperate with other companies in order to burgeon but he does not know how to communicate with other leaders. In theses cases companies fail to cooperate with each other and in even worse cases other companies abuse the mentioned company, and that is because when the leaders are conducting a contract the leader with less communication abilities fail to convince the other leaders to do what is more advantegous for his company.
All in all, I think one of the best ways to prepare young people to be great leaders is instilling the sense of cooperation in them. but policy makers should bear in mind that it will not help if they do not consider other elements. In fact, a good leader should have many good features such as cooperation sense, communication ability, slef denying, and ect to help the society develop.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, i mean, i think, in fact, of course, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87267904509 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63544103816 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405835543767 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8399957045 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8125 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235926833641 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925334033145 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861784698714 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161399465744 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527006391984 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.