"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
These days the life has become like a rat race.Everyone is running to be bettter than others . If you don't push youself then you might fail at life. This is emotionally nad mentally taxing.Here, writer says that preparing the youth for the future for leadership can be done by inculcating the sense of cooperation than competetion.I agree with the statement to a large extent.
As is it commonly said, Team work makes the dream work and I concur which this quote. If this kind of mentatily could be inculcated in the youth then it can definitely create leader of the future.Leadership is is not to order the people working in the team with the sense og superiority but to understand the strengths and weakness of the team and guide them to be better.
The sense of competetion comes along with some personal grudges and ego. So if you cannot be better at something then rather than working on yourself, pull your competitor down. And this sort of thought process could do more harm than benefit the society. There is a story about crabs which explains the point made above . An experiment was carried out by putting a certain number of crabs in a container, and it was observed that whenever a crab was tring to get out og the container , other crabs would pull it down . As a result, all the crabs were stuck in the jar .If they would have cooperated rather than pullingeach other down they would have been free.
In some instances , a healthy competetion cauld provide a better result. if we set out goals high and try to emuate someone who is better than us then it would help us to grow and lead to self growth.
The sense of coorperation would absolutely prepare the young generation for leadership and also nuture their mind to sort of help and also respect the people around .
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Everyone
...ays the life has become like a rat race.Everyone is running to be bettter than others . ...
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...one is running to be bettter than others . If you dont push youself then you might...
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... is running to be bettter than others . If you dont push youself then you might fa...
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...This is emotionally nad mentally taxing.Here, writer says that preparing the youth f...
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...e sense of cooperation than competetion.I agree with the statement to a large ext...
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...eam work and I concur which this quote. If this kind of mentatily could be inculca...
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... definitely create leader of the future.Leadership is is not to order the people working i...
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... create leader of the future.Leadership is is not to order the people working in the ...
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...rabs which explains the point made above . An experiment was carried out by puttin...
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...ab was tring to get out og the container , other crabs would pull it down . As a r...
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...ntainer , other crabs would pull it down . As a result, all the crabs were stuck i...
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...ult, all the crabs were stuck in the jar .If they would have cooperated rather tha...
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...t, all the crabs were stuck in the jar .If they would have cooperated rather than ...
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Message: Did you mean 'had cooperated'?
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...he crabs were stuck in the jar .If they would have cooperated rather than pullingeach other down they...
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...d have been free. In some instances , a healthy competetion cauld provide a b...
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...petetion cauld provide a better result. if we set out goals high and try to emuate...
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...auld provide a better result. if we set out goals high and try to emuate someone wh...
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...e sense of coorperation would absolutely prepare the young generation for leaders...
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... help and also respect the people around .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, kind of, sort of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 318.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65408805031 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61346681816 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578616352201 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0598651222 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.714285714 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147088900165 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480435795123 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466339457567 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839573743351 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585261332247 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 100.480337079 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.