Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.

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Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.

Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.

I completely agree with the claim that more emphasis should be given on picking worthy goals rather than follow one's dream.The reason behind the claim is also justified.
Many people prioritize their own dreams over anything.They often try to do every possible things to achieve their dream.Often they become selfish in their trajectory.For example Some people may want to become rich as soon as possible.They want a luxurious life without a single hard work.Some people may want to become rich by creating social turmoil.They prefer robbing,killing ,murdering ,smuggling to become a rich person in the shortest possible time.As a result dreams like these are often considered inherently selfish and should be not followed entirely.
On the other hand,people with worthy goals have figured out the right path to carry on their dreams.In their voyage they are quite careful about choosing the right path.For example if the goal of anyone is to serve for the country ,in any condition he is ready to serve for his nation.He can not be selfish and just flee away form his service.For the safety of his country he is even ready to give up his life.This type of worthy goal thus never be selfish and always be emphasized
In conclusion,the fact of choosing worthy goals should always be emphasized over choosing only one's dream.Because choosing worthy goals can only bring about the prosperity with the goal.So it should be emphasized over dreams.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.3162921348 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1209.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 237.0 442.535393258 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10126582278 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76554517816 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582278481013 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 704.065955056 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 20.2370786517 15% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 79.0 23.0359550562 343% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 227.832296998 60.3974514979 377% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 403.0 118.986275619 339% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 79.0 23.4991977007 336% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 27.6666666667 5.21951772744 530% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 7.80617977528 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229653457814 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16963282592 0.0831039109588 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467336907092 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145304205939 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561116167311 0.0667264976115 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 42.1 14.1392134831 298% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -8.71 48.8420337079 -18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.1 12.1743820225 280% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.48 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.49 8.38706741573 125% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 100.480337079 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 11.8971910112 235% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 33.6 11.2143820225 300% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 34.0 11.7820224719 289% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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