Claim: Young people's tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills.
Reason: These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships online rather than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based
The given claim and reason states that because portable device encourage users to form affected personalities and connections online rather than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them, young people’s tendency to make extensive use of these devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills. The given topic is highly contentious because different people may have disparate opinions and position in the topic. Some can go for the topic and others cannot argue with it at all. Personally, I agree with the given claim and the reason; reasons and examples supporting the positon is presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, when young people use portable devices like smartphones and tablets for long duration, they will have less interactions among the people in real life; due to this reason they are unable to develop social skills like how they should talk with different people, deal with different people, respect different people so obviously the such devices encourage to make artificial relations, young people cannot develop social skills. For instance, Ram used to play tablets and smartphones daily, he had always given priority to portable devices than the people in real, later he had very little social skills. Many call him gauche due to his poor social skills; he unable to succeed in real life like in job interview, in party, etc. Therefore, due to extensive use of portable devices Ram lost the social skills.
Furthermore, those who use extensive portable devices do not understand the social skills because they think smartphones and tablets is everything in this universe; they assume that we can get everything in the such devices connecting the internet like fun, friends, etc. So due their misconception they do not want to make friend in real, do not want meet people and relatives they just love virtual life this hurts their development of social skills. For example, Denish, who is my causin, smartphones too much so that he thinks he can get everything on the social media at the same time he cannot understand the importance of development of social skills. Therefore, due to overuse of smartphones, now he even cannot deal with the people, relatives which is hampering in his personal, academic life.
However, some people might argue that, using such devices is good in developing the social skills because they can see many different people, meet different people and can learn by seeing them. While it cannot deny that using such devices can learn social skills, it has more negative impact than positive; it can teach young people very little skills but in real life they need different type of social skills, they have to develop in real.
In conclusion, the reasons and examples presented support my position on the given claim and reason that young people’s tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills because such devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationship online rather than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...r than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them, young people’s tendency to make extens...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun interactions is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...blets for long duration, they will have less interactions among the people in real l...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...so obviously the such devices encourage to make artificial relations, young people cann...
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Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun call seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many calls'.
Suggestion: Many calls
...later he had very little social skills. Many call him gauche due to his poor social skill...
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Line 7, column 120, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... the social skills because they can see many different people, meet different people and can l...
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Line 8, column 384, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...r than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, honestly, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2648.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18199608611 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56935015057 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405088062622 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 817.2 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.54990745 60.3974514979 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.533333333 118.986275619 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.0666666667 23.4991977007 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.21951772744 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.490576854229 0.243740707755 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18969973363 0.0831039109588 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.203967505452 0.0758088955206 269% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.356516630065 0.150359130593 237% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183579607814 0.0667264976115 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 14.1392134831 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.