CLAIM: Young people’s tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like
smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills.
REASON: These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships
online rather than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them.
Due to technological advancements, electronic devices like smart phones and tablets with internet access have become an integral part of the lives of many young minds. While it is true that this can have a profound effect on their malleable brains, I do not completely agree with the claim that the rate at which these devices are being currently used by the youth, can deter their socio-developmental skills due to the reason that they tend to form factitious personalities and relationships and refrain from engaging with people that surround them. I hold this opinion because I feel that these technological devices can actually help them develop their social skills and also save a lot of their time leaving them with more time to engage in activities that develop their relationships with other people and their personalities.
To begin with, today young people have an access to various resources of information via their smartphones and tablets. This can help them analyse various issues and the different aspects of these issues. In absence of these people would read about these issues via print media which usually have a single author and can thus give them limited information from a single perspective. Thus the yougsters who have similar points of view can come together and form groups and interact and discuss these. Thus instead of their opinions remaining boxed, electronic media provides them opportunities to increase their social circle and improves their communication and social skills. For instance, people who believe in conservation of environment can come together via various online platforms, voice their concerns and work collectively towards their goal. Thus not only their communication skills, but also their personalities and relationships develop.
Furthermore, mobiles and tablets help the youngsters do a lot of their activities much faster. Thus they are left with more time to spend with their families and friends. Therefore usage of these devices like smartphones and tablets can actually help them develop their relationships and social skills. For example, a tablet or smartphone can help a school student get done with his assignments quicker. This will leave him with much more time to spend with his parents and with his friends. He can also use various online communication platforms to discuss the assignment with his friends. Thus his skills, relationships as also his own personality are being positively influenced by the technology.
However, like every coin with two sides it is true that the youth are certainly exposed to a lot of unchecked information by people who are not experts via electronic media which can affect their opinions and personalities. It can also cause them to develop addictions to these sources. For example, a youngster becomes addicted to a mobile game that involves violence, he will keep playing it all day and reduce interaction with his family and change his personality to a violent one. These side effects come with the loads of advantages that these technological devices have to offer us.
Thus the issue is complex with no real answers. However in my opinion it is wrong to come to conclusion that smartphones and tablets negatively affect the youth's personality, relationships and social skills because these devices can actually help them develop these in a number of ways.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 33.0505617978 230% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2851.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 541.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26987060998 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8757311435 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45101663586 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 872.1 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3573936454 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.956521739 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5217391304 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255270107913 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891279003147 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728720718654 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170321041545 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534163889379 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.