Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Having a quality education is necessary to secure a good future for a nation. To ensure a quality education, a student has to pass through many competitive exams at many levels. It is not uncommon for students to work tirelessly for securing the first position in any competitive exam and instantly doubting oneself when one fails to achieve such. The prompt suggests that such competition limits the quality of learning. While I mostly disagree with this statement for two reasons , I do believe that sometimes taking competition to an extreme level may hinder one's perspective of learning.
To begin, healthy competition among peers is good for personal growth of a student. Competition helps them understand their ability by comparing themselves with their peers and thus making them work harder towards strengthening their abilities and increasing their knowledge. The absence of any competition will only make students lethargic and eventually they will become more complacent with any output and not work towards achieving a better knowledge. For instance, many extra curricular competitions are held at many level of educational institutions. And having a healthy competition among their peers will encourage students to participate in those competitions and work towards achieving better skills. The lack of any sense of competition will discourage students from attending any extra curricular events thus becoming complacent towards what they are receiving rather than working for something greater. This example demonstrates how a healthy competition will make students more inclined towards working for an incentive or better output rather than just be complacent with what knowledge they are receiving through a curriculum.
Furthermore, competitions at school and college level is only preparing a student for the real life. The job market in real world is brutal, where hundreds and maybe thousands of candidates are contending for the same job. Through competitions at all levels of educations, student learns to become a part of the hustle of real life. And it will make their transition to the real world smoother. A student group who has grown up seeing no competition among peers will face hardships while transitioning to the real life. And learning to work for higher grades through competition will help student understand how working persistently for achieving and strengthening one's set of skills will make them more fit for the job market.
Lastly , I do concede that sometimes the goal of achieving higher grades become more important for the students than the process of learning when the competitions are extreme. Such situations do hinder the quality of education. Extreme competitions are not healthy for students. For such situations , educational institutions at a macro scale should impose rules and standards so that the competition doesn't get extreme. For instances, there are many cases, where a student securing the first positions is getting so many praises from everyone while the students who couldn't secure a good position are getting reprimanded in their home or from even teachers. Such cases should be discouraged. Rather teachers should try to encourage healthy competition where even if a student fail to achieve their desired grade, teachers and parents should encourage them to try for the next time rather than reprimanding them and making them feel isolated.
In conclusion, healthy competitions for higher grades make students more determined and hard working. Competitions help them understand how to work for their goals and how to achieve success in attaining their goals. However, extreme competition does more harm than good at any level of education.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 482, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: many levels
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Suggestion: couldn't
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...g reprimanded in their home or from even teachers. Such cases should be discourag...
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Line 7, column 696, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...hers. Such cases should be discouraged. Rather teachers should try to encourage health...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, then, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3137.0 2235.4752809 140% => OK
No of words: 580.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40862068966 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90360011284 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424137931034 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 964.8 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8655274557 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.035714286 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67857142857 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200981929274 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762217314993 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452544107082 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143970777321 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452839237036 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 482, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...gree with this statement for two reasons , I do believe that sometimes taking comp...
^^
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es perspective of learning. To begin, healthy competition among peers is good ...
^^
Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun level seems to be countable; consider using: 'many levels'.
Suggestion: many levels
...tra curricular competitions are held at many level of educational institutions. And having...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...m more fit for the job market. Lastly , I do concede that sometimes the goal of...
^^
Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ealthy for students. For such situations , educational institutions at a macro sca...
^^
Line 7, column 402, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s and standards so that the competition doesnt get extreme. For instances, there are m...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 506, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... student securing the first positions is getting so many praises from everyone wh...
^^
Line 7, column 569, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...es from everyone while the students who couldnt secure a good position are getting repr...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 650, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g reprimanded in their home or from even teachers. Such cases should be discourag...
^^
Line 7, column 696, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...hers. Such cases should be discouraged. Rather teachers should try to encourage health...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, then, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3137.0 2235.4752809 140% => OK
No of words: 580.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40862068966 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90360011284 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424137931034 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 964.8 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8655274557 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.035714286 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67857142857 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200981929274 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762217314993 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452544107082 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143970777321 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452839237036 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.