One of the places for students to get ready for their future career and job are Educational institutions. These places are responsible for making clear for students how their future will be based on their current decisions. Students' inner passion and interest make them make decisions most of the time. However, Educational institutions play an essential role in establishing students' passion and interest. Therefore, I strongly agree with this prompt, and in what follows, I will elaborate my opinion with two reasons.
First, not all students at this age can make reasonable and perfect decisions based on their talent and passion. It is clear that a person can have a dream from childhood, but a dream can be true if that person has at least the inner material such as talent on that job. Although people may say a lot that passion is an essential key to choosing your way, I believe that passion is necessary for making decisions, but it is not sufficient for students who dream of being a doctor or nurse or hospital-related jobs. The passion can make them choose this career, but what if one is so scared of blood? Can a doctor be a successful and good doctor even though he or she is afraid of blood? If a person is not a kid-lover, being a children's doctor will worsen her or him and the children. So the passion can ignite energy for starting a career, but it can not make sure one can be successful in that career. In my opinion, one of the responsibilities of Educational institutions is to admonish students from what they are choosing as their future career; what has expected them when they get that job after all hardship during this journey.
Second, sometimes students' decisions are emotional and based on trends between other students. for example, nowadays, the field of computer science is a trend major in most countries and cities. Furthermore, figuratively, many job positions are available for new graduates. One with a gifted art talent can be good at programming and computer science subjects through exercise and study. Nevertheless, in my idea, because he or she has an innate talent in art, can be more creative and successful in that major. He or she may indeed pass his or her course successfully, but in my opinion, the creativity, talent, and pleasure when working as an artist are much more and better than working as a programmer. Someone should notice this matter to students in order to make students pursue their passion and inner gifted talent not.
Although some people may believe that Educational institutions should not make decisions or judge students, in my opinion, it is beneficial for students too if they know the result of their decisions before making it or lose their time. They can use other experiences instead of experiencing them and getting hurt. To wrap it up, based on the reason mentioned above, one can conclude that the role of Educational institutions in the students' future career is mandatory, and their experience in the form of admonishing students is needed.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...based on trends between other students. for example, nowadays, the field of compute...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, after all, at least, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 517.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87234042553 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80653841052 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437137330754 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5852588143 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.52173913 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4782608696 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91304347826 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147908773039 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480397257584 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541232039753 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104523105962 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331730811738 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...based on trends between other students. for example, nowadays, the field of compute...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, after all, at least, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 517.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87234042553 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80653841052 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437137330754 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5852588143 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.52173913 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4782608696 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91304347826 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147908773039 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480397257584 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541232039753 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104523105962 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331730811738 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.