It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It is said that being to adhere to our own beliefs is more beneficial than to ignore them. I agree with this statement to some extent.
On the one hand, I can understand those who believe that people have to adhere to their beliefs. When people believe in their beliefs, they can increase their confidence and gain the respect of others. For example, in a company, if employees try to adhere to his /her beliefs and convictions, their colleagues and boss have more respect for them. By contrast, if they ignore their beliefs in favor of others, after a while they will be considered an aimless individual. People will be more reluctant to give them responsibility and trust them. Therefore, if people want to have more social respect in their society in the groups, they should attempt to adhere to their beliefs. Besides, there are some psychology benefits for people who do not ignore their convictions. Firstly, they can be satisfied with themselves. Because they act according to what they believe. Secondly, being to adhere to their own beliefs help people to respect themselves, and they can learn how to respect others ‘beliefs. This can help them to increase their social skills in communication with other individuals.
On the other hand, despite the benefits mentioned above, being too committed to your beliefs and interests can also have some disadvantages. For example, sometimes the beliefs or interests of some people are against the benefits of a large group of individuals and sometimes can cause their death. Some people like Hitler were stubborn about their beliefs and put many people in danger of death. Now he is reminded as a killer in the world. We have to consider that being to commit to our beliefs is valuable to what some extent. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Is it against the benefits of others? There is no passionate about being committed to our beliefs when they cause people to be under pressure and sadness.
In conclusion, I believe that we have to be committed to our benefits and interest until it is valuable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 819, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... they can be satisfied with themselves. Because they act according to what they believe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 351.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92022792023 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71530747808 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447293447293 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2290691924 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.5 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9545454545 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116463499692 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466022120103 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513302147697 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986316420345 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932095560736 0.0667264976115 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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