"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college"
"Orange and Apple are not the same though they both are fruits".The prompt recommends that all students should be studying the same national curriculum until they enter college. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this suggestion of following the same syllabus.
To begin, not all students are interested in the same career path or the same interest in their life. Thus to choose the same curriculum over based on one's interest is not a good suggestion. For instance, as said by great Elbert Einstein "Don't judge fish by its ability to fly and a bird to swim". This implies that not everyone is suited for every task exists. Some might be good at singing, dancing, programming, or any other activities.
Further, even if we bombarded the students with the curriculum which is followed by all student it will give rise to the competition which will lead to the destruction of knowledge and not growth. For instance, a student good in maths may or may not be good in other vocational subjects but due to under pressure, he might end up ruining maths also which will make him stand nowhere.
Of course, some argue that it will help develop an interest in students' minds about which career path they want to follow. However, isn't that precisely why students end up baffled about their career and choose wrong decisions. Thus on macro-scale curriculum should be designed in such a way that it should be able to mold the student's career and life in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...stion of following the same syllabus. To begin, not all students are intereste...
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...ath or the same interest in their life. Thus to choose the same curriculum over base...
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..., programming, or any other activities. Further, even if we bombarded the studen...
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...reer path they want to follow. However, isnt that precisely why students end up baff...
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...heir career and choose wrong decisions. Thus on macro-scale curriculum should be des...
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... way that it should be able to mold the students career and life in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 2235.4752809 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 254.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88188976378 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68484308978 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 215.323595506 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566929133858 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 704.065955056 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5679545844 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.333333333 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241407826194 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811012265555 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992072914767 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153794567382 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103651680809 0.0667264976115 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 100.480337079 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.