A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Education as one of the most important goals of a nation offers the necessary knowledge for students to not only fit in the society and pursue better careers in their life but also realize the mechanism underlying the world as well as the ability to think for themselves. Through the standard uniform national education strategy, schools are capable of evaluating the performance of every student on the same basis. However, it seems that, instead of enlightening the curiosity of students toward this world, most education systems failed as a giant filter factory, encouraging competition of teenagers, selecting the elites, and filtering out those with poor grades.
Undeniable, by setting the standard, it is fair for every students. For example, back in old history, the statue of people was given when they got born, and education was a luxury product made for the aristocracy. Therefore, the social hierarchy was unlikely to change as such, the poor would remain poor no matter how. Fairness creates more chances for people to reverse their social statue by studying hard. Nevertheless, this kind of fairness intrinsically creates a battle field for students to compete with one another in order to pursue higher grades. For instance, in Taiwan, after school, most of students usually go to cram school for exactly the same courses in hope of getting perfect scores in the university entrance exam. Students study not base on their interest but only for the exam. As a result, most people go into colleges yet lose any interest in study. The environment is fair, but insalubrious and aberrant.
The other fatal mistake of the national curriculum is that the amounts of subjects are limited. For example, in Taiwan, schools only offers few varieties of courses, and evaluate every students based on this few topics. Unable to know the ability of students beyond subjects in schools, such as dancing, music, philosophy, art, and so on, schools fail to give comprehensive judgment. The national curriculum doesn’t give equal respect to some other subjects which may be just as important as those taught in school.
In conclusion, the national curriculum is fair for offering every students to receive the same education and equal chances to get into university. But because of its uniformed standard, the education become twisted and lose its inchoate meaning in encouraging students to pursue their dream. In addition, the education fail to give integrated evaluation of students, it’s unfair in this sense that some abilities are over addressed than others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
... For instance, in Taiwan, after school, most of students usually go to cram school for exactly t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, of course, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2313253012 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72718501467 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53734939759 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2670718938 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.263157895 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172297989411 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584488456981 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582566356801 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1176808729 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341781730432 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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